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"Love's Emptiness"
...I Love You...Do You Love Me..? ...Or Is It Destiny...For Me To Be Played Again..? Thoughts in my mind...Jenn...I can't get her out... ...Sit...drink whiskey...my life sucks without a doubt Why should it hurt..? Am I truly all that surprised..? ...I loose hope...I cry till I physically damage my eyes The pedal of a flower...wilted, hanging alone in the breeze... ...Same thing as me...I pray to God, I am begging on my knees But I am in a dark, black desert...lightning flashes across the sky... ...The choice of life, the choice of death...I would honestly rather die I wake up...a horrible dream that states in itself true an accurate... ...I feel like crying...But I have cried so hard, my eyes can't master it I lay myself down to sleep...again these images again I see... ...I'm in rags...alone...cold, and everybody else towering over me The glands in my eyes...they just can't seem to work... ...The corner of my eye...a girl...she feels the same hurt I awake again...my own mind already begins to decieve it... ...Somebody who actually could understand...I don't dare dream it I meet somebody...a girl who asks me if she can speak her mind... ...She explains to me all of her problems...I get a tingle in my spine "I feel like there is no hope...nobody in this world seems to love me..." ...I was so happy...this long journey, both, we could stop trudging Shayla...such a beautiful name...to match with such an angel's face... ...What I felt with Jenn...hah...compared to this, that was only a taste But I go drinking with my friends...and Shayla's sister gives me a ring... ...She asks me out...In my drunkeness, I just wanna laugh and sing Of course I say yes...I don't really remember the conversation... ...She takes things serious quick...she talks about marriage congragation But all this time...my feelings for Shayla are still true and pure... ...'Cause there was darkness before...and she was the only cure And now I am here...trapped in a cage...I hope you're getting this... ...'Cause me and Shayla share love...but we're in Love's Emptiness... ...Based On True Events... |
Uppin' for some feedback...favors will be returned.
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damn that was fuckn dope. u got the goods and you showed it here. imagery was like oh my! but yo, this was very nicely done. mad props.
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Samething As Trauma Said
This Shit Was Dope Creative Imaginary And U Had Feelings In This Shit Damn It I Gots To Get Back In The Open Mic Section Lol Nicly Done Fam |
def agree wit everyone that said stuff this was full of emotion and imagry.....very nicely written man......hit up my OM in my sig........nice wording on some of the shit too and the multi's seemed to work out beautifuly.....very nice......keep it up fam :thumbup:
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Uppin' for some fuckin' feed...been slept on...
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Full of emotion...This was very deep man...nice imagry...Im feelin this because I have been thru some similar experiences along the road...Good drop fam...1
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A'ight thanks...uppin' for some more feed...favors will be returned...
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Whoa...fuckin' dope as fuck...I am nominating this for Open Mic of the fuckin' month...werd, dope shit.
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A'ight thanks...uppin' for some more feed...
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Yo Mang, Nicely Done, Good Emotion On This Piece, I Know How It Goes Hommie I'm On The Same Thing Right Now, Decent Vocabulary, Structure,...10/10
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A'ight thanks...uppin' for some more feed...favors will be returned...
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