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wicked clown vs lyric
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Lifes a mess, everythings passing me by people often ask me why it is that i cry at night and why am i filled with pain sun never shines, the sky always rains on top of me as i pass through the day waiting for the end to come and take me away i can see death lurking at every corner i pass im so affraid, it feels like shards of glass penetrating deep into my soul as the days progress heaveyness and weight always on my chest death is always on my tail and i can see it even in the light no one understands why im filled with utter fright ive lost the fight and no one knows how i feel this is so overwelming i cant belive its so real every meal could be my last and i dont know what to do at all or even where to go tomorrow is guaranteed to no one this is true but when death lerks in the shadows commin for you all you will know is the fright that it comes with cause this is real and is no ultimate myth so many things can be in the shadows you pass but only one will eventualy cross everyones path and that is the reaper, the bringer of the end the one who knows where your soul to send so be warry of the shadows and the darkness that be for eventualy your time will arive and you to will see |
Figures flicker off alley ways, devious shapes move Hideous pictures, peering from caverns and grooves Lonely insecuritys walk cautiosly down dark streets Eyes staring at the ground, briskly moving the feet Stereotypical neighborhood, grafitti on the walls With gangs prowling after hours, behind hidden falls Homeless light fires, in trashcans to hold in warmth Police sirens in the distance, provide calming of sorts Hoardes a mice scamper, paws echo of the pavement Screeches from car tires, hit and run for amazement Shattered glass on the ground, spider cracks the panes Bullets change directions, disillusioned with their aim Water leaks from buildings, discoloring their surfaces Forming puddles of rust on pictures of perfectness Rap music from boomboxes trembles the heart Vibrations slowly tear, natural rationality apart A home to false impressions, with everything to lose Type of scenes you see, so often depicted on the news As this lonely neighborhood, gloomy as the gallows Fear and dangerous stereotypes, lurking in the shadows |
Vote: lyric
Lyric -vocab on pint -structure on point -best topic coverage out of all poems ive looked @ so far -great imagery continously -no emotion, try and create this or put some in -8.5/10 WickedClown -tight poem -didnt cover topic that much -dnt worry as much bout rhyming u can sacrifice it for imagery and flow -emotion was there -7/10 |
dam I loved lyrics poetry,
I think his flow of his poem was better no affense. I think hi structure was better, and also his opener-closure was good his imagry was execellent and last but not less his poem flowed better to me. VOTE LYRIC |
lyric wins 2-0.
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