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La Cosa Nostra 12-22-04 08:16 AM

30 Minute topical verse.. By Nostradamus.
 
This shit was a topical against Razah on rcn, I wrote it at 5am in about 30 minutes. But I got the win due to a no show, so thats why I'm posting it here to get feedback. :)

Enjoy.

Take a trip with me, slip inside my shoes and walk a mile..
I’ve been punished, robbed of freedom, and beaten as a child..
My existence is wild, blistered by the system I grew up in..
Stitched lips in refugee camps, maybe pain will teach me something..
A profound substance, how blood boils when your depressed..
Betrayed my country and my people, now I’m constantly stressed..
Its all a test, some would say, that left me on foreign lands..
I’m holding hands, a broken man folding on no demands..
A flowing stance, growing impatient waiting for my chance..
To gain a voice inside my nation, to rally troops for an advance..
Fuck Sadam’s system of living, its giving me scars of war..
I need to unite, stand and fight along side my people for the cause..
Though haunting flaws, follow me every single place I go..
Nobody knows my own oppression, inside my soul it grows..
I was a refugee, formed into a leader of my people..
The rebel yell, standing up against currant government’s evil..
Not a sequel to my predecessors, I stand to improve my nation..
My brains racing, thoughts different to my facial demonstration..
Steady pacing inside my bedroom, my social life’s disconnected..
At any minute I could be dead soon, fuck being disrespected..
(BANG)
“FREEZE!! HIT THE FLOOR!!”
I saw a reapers figure.. I could of sworn
After the flash of a trigger being pulled, my flesh was torn..
It was a stand off, I had an eagle aimed at a mans face..
He had an Mp5 sub, I pulled quick to save face..
The stage laced with bullets soon after I fell from grace..
I caught a glimpse of the dead body I shot, so out of place..
It was a damn shame, but life’s always been unpredictable..
Were just victims of fate, so what are we even living for?
Giving all, I had into my nation with problems faced..
But in death, I realise life is more than just a waste..
I was 46, one single thought stuck inside my mind..
The phrase ‘Death Before Dishonor’ is why I died tonight..
So as I leave life un-lived, I take a laugh at fate..
The most important lesson in life..
...........................Was simply learnt to late..

La Cosa Nostra 12-23-04 05:13 AM

Uppin... Why is no1 leaving feedback...
...................:nono:

GangsStarShit 12-23-04 05:14 AM

Coz your Havocc...Nice verse wasn't bad for 30 mins work but do us 1 favour...go back to Nostradamus coz my heads confused...

Terumoto 12-23-04 07:08 AM

It was fine... Stop bein such a textcee

La Cosa Nostra 12-23-04 07:25 AM

Word.. I left that gay site due to the overdose of nerds it had on it..

Terumoto 12-23-04 07:26 AM

nerds are nerds................. ya know?

La Cosa Nostra 12-23-04 10:14 PM

Damn this shit is slept on..
No1 Reading it for some reason..

Sukkas 12-25-04 03:47 PM

what other site were you at? i been to alot. why don't ya get a original name too. i mean nostradomus and havoc are takin. just my 2 cents. as for ya verse for a 1/2 hour ya coulda done better. i usually write verses in 5 minutes, cause i freestyle all the time. supernatural like and shit. not as good though. what was the topic. war or soldier or something


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