help!!!!!
 

ok, i have been on this site for a little while doin battles and such. my record is like 4-4. i dropped this short key below, and please gimme some feedback on improvements that could be made in my style, cuz im not doin that well on this site so far. thanks.

yo anyone that wanna drop, in a battle VS Gok/
got anotha thing comin, whether i go hard or not/
wit nouns and verbs i kick them to tha curb, in a blur/
like some rice you'll be fried and stirred, thats my word/
wit lyrics, i reincarnate spirits so they can hear-it/
life has passengers and drivers/
gimme the wheel so i can steer-it/
the puns alone, got they own flow/
when its on in a go, do i hesitate? no!/
i just spit whatever comes out, so watch ya mouth/
gonna show u how tha DAI GAO gets down/

that was cool but you could use Wordplay, vocab, multies, and a slight rhyme scheme adjustment for better flow

keep spit aight

and drop some feed back on my post

holla

yeah u just gotta elevate, when i started out on other sites my first 4 battles i lost untill i elevated and got better.

ya shit waz strait to dawg !!

--1huned--

elavation is best achieved by listening to rappers like rakim and wu tang, by reading and listening to vets of this site. up the sophistication of your vocab and pick an original concept to write about and you'll be on your way to illness.