Kordozar vs Killa Trix
 

Battle Rules:

8 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 12-24-04 at 01:46 AM

Must drop verse in 35 minutes after check in.

Killa Trix has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 11:52 PM.

Kordozar has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-23-04 11:59 PM.

yo dis is killa new to da mix/ u be stunned of my 9s grips/ ill make u fall down broken/ like u saved urself when the paster has spoken/ u prayin to jesus hopen/ dat killa dont put his wrath on you/ ur gunna get booed outa dis mix gettin trash thrown at you/ RV should uv already thrown you out/ like a hoe gettin boned out/ maybe u need to get repolished like my rims chromed out/

iight wut do i do when i posted it do i wait for you?

Voted For: Kordozar

This battle wasnt hard to pick a winner at all...

Killa Trix: Looks like your new here so maybe I will show you a few things. First off, try to fix your structure because to me it looks as tho you have written 10 poor lines althought the line requirements say 8 lines in the rules. But anyways, se how Kordozar wrote his...try that out in your next battle and you will find it is alot more organized and easier to read. Next, up your vocab a bit...your lyrics werre elementary in this battle, dont be afraid to replace a word with a larger word with the same meaning, if you need help with that stuff, there are many online dictionarys/thresaurus' that could help you. And finally...try using metas and multies, I see you tried to a little bit but they just hurt you more than your opponent. For these reasons that I just helped you elevate in, is why you are not getting my vote today, but no hate dawg, I wanna see you do well so please, take my advice, nice effort.

Kordozar: You did pretty good. Got my vote anyways because you had a better structure, harder punches/personals, and nice metas. But I always like helping ppl to improve their game's so heres yours...You had several spelling errors in your verse. Maybe re-read it before you post, or if you need help, paste it into MS Word and have it spell checked for you. Next, Your vocab could also use a little help, Like I said to Trix, don't hesitate to replace a word for a larger word - It actually makes yourself sound more intelligent. But other than those things I thought you did excellent...You have my vote, but only if you return the favour below...

Trix = 3/10 Kordozar = 7.5/10

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This was feedback posted for Kordozar
 

if i had enough posts to vote..then i would, but Kordozar killed Killa Trix..sorry to say

Voted For: Kordozar

One-Sided battle here

Kordozar took this one wit harder punches
a better structure, decent flow & nice vocab
but overall u had a nice drop tho

Trix elevate more tho..and look @ the Tutorial
section...to help get better cuz ur drop was weak

RTF Kordozar

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Voted For: Kordozar


Alright This Was Kordozars Battle Hands Down, Punches Was Kordozar He Came Way Harder With This One, Personas Kordozar, Rhyme Scehme Was None Of Yall Had Some Okay WordPlay...
Punches-Kor
WordPlay-Kor
Personals-Tie
Vocabular-Kor
Structure-Kor

Voted For: Kordozar

OK KILLA HE OVER THE LINES OR UNDER THEM EITHER WAY HE LOSSES THIS

Voted For: Kordozar

yo kordozar battle had a good opener an a good finish

hers the opener i liked

Befores This Newbie Reaches 30 Posts I'll End His Carrier..
Ibpimpinhard69?Onli Pimps Tranvestites And Queers..

an heres the finisher i liked

Since "Trix" Wanna Be A Killa I'll Make Sure He Gets "Boxed"..
He Wont Have A Perfect Record,Cus His First Loss Is Finish..
And He'll Be Hated By Most Of Rv "Kids" Like A Bowl Of Spinach..

Now its funny how he used his name to clown him
good punch line as well

but killa trix your opener was as dead as the grave yard
heres a sample

yo dis is killa new to da mix/ u be stunned of my 9s grips/ ill make u fall down broken/ like u saved urself when the paster has spoken/ u prayin to jesus ,,
'
Im not even going to start with the finisher,there was none
comming from you,,,no hate just work on your flow homme