Fight Back Blacks
 

yo this is a short lil spit about the inglewood shit, niggas gettin beat in the streetz

short flow lemme know if I should make it longer, like into a full song

verse

yo our niggas is gettin beat down by police violence/ while we stare in silence/ bust this nigga and swing back/ be strong and proud to be black/ I'm havin flashbax, rodney king beatin reborn/ The black community was torn/ let us not begin to sit back with this one/ videotaper arrested nigga fuck this, is this what white america calls justice?/ if this is it put us back on the boat and give us our huts n sticks/ we rollin from the hoods and ghettos black america calls out for justice...


lemme know y'a'll

it was short-n-simple

but yet sweet

you really can't complain on struture
when it's a verse to uplift

you have a pretty good head start
goahead and finish the race

holla

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i like this shit it carry'z a strong message......check my spits to holla

i think... if i turn this into an actual song, I'm goin to use this as a chorus? no?

good shit dog i was feelin that joint i don't really kno about a chorus though
C.F.C

tsk, a little expansion on the length and an uppin of the vocab really required here. but you picked a topic to push your rhymes in, which is a really good idea and had some decent imagery as well.

pzz.

up

not hatin' or none like that..but sunny..chu had a good frame of mind on it..but i felt it could've been deeper..more detail...andd lit like that..but keep it up

it ain't a song, just a potential chorus

wasn't really feelin this.. i know it came from the heart where it counts the most... your flow was bad and your structure was simple, make it more complex and it'll be enjoyable...but this was an OK spit..