a little story
New Years Eve 2001 the night we began.
Remember it clear as day, sitting in that room, bottle spins and it lands on you. Smile on our faces, lips touch for the first time, only a peck but I couldn’t resist had to slip in a little tongue. That moment on I knew one day we would be together. Summer begins playing man hunt in the neighborhood always hide with each other just so we can be together. Liked you so much I was just to scared to show it. We kissed again and from there on every night we tried to play the game. Didn’t plan on having you forever but plans change. Every summer from there on we got to see each other. 2005 Four years later we still want each other. We’ve been through a lot. All the good and the bad. Now we have a chance to be together. Do we take it or let it slip??Answer me at 12:10a.m. on January 1st. The four year anniversary of our first kiss. leave some feedback plz. |
quit sleepin on this feedback plz
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Nice piece dog.............you remind me of Nas.......keep up that style.......props on tha word play.....Peayce
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ay thanks fa the feed keep it comin leave a link n i'll hit u back
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Damn man can't believe my shit gettin slept on again...feedback plz
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feedback please. leave a link i'll return the favor
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uppin this c'mon yall drop somethin
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damn drop some feedback don't just read it
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is dat a true story?
no matter, it was hot. the idea was good, i like to write stuff like that too great job |
thanks fa the feedback...n yea it is a true story. uppin
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You can tell it when stuff comes right from the heart...It was nice, i prefer reading real stuff and this was one of those drops. I hope to read more of you in the future, keep doing your thing!
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Don't be surprised ya stuff gets slept on, not a lot of people rate poetry. It started out kind of slow, but about the 6th line it started picking up. Good stuff, keep it up. It's hard to write good poems that don't have a rhyme scheme, but you did a good job. My link is my battle really, it's a topical. If you can't vote then just leave feedback, because that's appreciated just as much. px
*EDIT* Forgot to rate it. 7/10 |
thanks fa the feed...yea i'll hit yall back w/ feed...uppin
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feedback leave a link n i'll return the favor
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