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Trust?
Chorus: I'M SUPPOSED TO TRUST YOU in the crush shoes with the plush boobs all day all the dudes tryin to touch you I'M SUPPOSED TO TRUST YOU in the rough crews tryin to be tough dude talkin like you bust but i can bust to fool I'M SUPPOSED TO TRUST YOU trust dudes trust crews trust you trust rules what rules trust you dudes what trust
Verse: you can't be serious until my demise i'm still gon' be wise and steal on these guys but still they gon' try to be me they gon try to see me yall niggas can't be me these babies is still premies yall easy to read like golden books wit golden gloves i'm throwin out goldin hooks who told you look forget what you thought you know these flo's ain't the only thing i sought you know if you messin with the river you done caught the flo and i wouldn't settle for less so i sought for more i'm not fresh to death dog i'm terminally ill permanantly skilled don't get extermanally killed i can cock and lift and aim cop the fifth and drain pop and split the frame drop and roll and stop don't try to bring it to me hot you actin like you got something i ain't got and i'm a spit lyrical bullets until everybody drop and everything's a go until everything stop what you thought it's the roc... naw maybe not it's the freestyle circle me and charm records we'll work ya me and seven deuce will just hurt ya you'll get your legs broke over five bucks in a church so listen it's simple as this yall niggas get off my dick i'll let you eat after i get off my brick we the world's most dangerous click WE CHARM DEUCE get ya mind right bitch Chorus: Some body post a verse and finish this song out wit me i know somebody out there got the skill |
stcutre was off badly....your vocab was alright....nothing to great i would give your verse an...3/10....sry gotta be honest...no hate tho
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yea ur strucutre was off but u know what...if u read it the right way then ur flow was veerrrrry easy to grasp (good thing).....sounded like a freestyle to me....i used to flow like this when i 1st got into hip hop and i wrote my stuff down on pad and paper
now i just use microsoft word.......anyway keep lookin at the type of stuff i do....1st thing u wanna do is get a topic...second thing is that u wanna stay on it...and last thing......which is an advancement no one here on the site can do.....learn wordplay.....look at my piece hip hop warrior or final review to see what im talkin about if u need more guidance....u know the name hit me up......im far more advanced with wordplay than anyone on here...can elevate u with ease d.a. |
It Wa Spreety God Man Rhyming Was Kinda Basic Flow Was Kinda Off Structre Was Good Next Time Try To Shorten Ya Lines Make Em
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