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Places 2 go, People 2 see: freestyle
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i got places 2 go got people 2 see i'm comin 4 u hoes who tried 2 fuck wit me 1 can kiss my ass tha otha blow dick 4 runnin ya mouf fast u'll end up in a hole quick i'm on a mission 2 get richer, ambitions of flippin scripture on these bitches and they censure, cuz when i look in tha mirror I see a shadow in tha darkness just waitin 4 bitches 2 start shit bitch controversy i spark it, hit my enemies with darts-it makes tha faggots go retarded kill 'em wit lyrical bombardment strap they ass up in a harness beat 'em while they unguarded their screams is neva regarded their dreams are now discarded i'm not playin around no more so when kilo walks in tha door i'm bringin with me true war and my enemies they'll soar when i smack 'em up like a whore i'm tha 1 tha bitches adore tha 1 that tha hoes send for reason for their clothes' decore ......oh my, hoes is galore when my gats take tha floor its not playtime anymore i'm exposin blood and gore like tha american civil war I'm tired of these bitch cowards justa lookin at me all sour i'll beat 'em 2 a bloody scour and resume my world power like osama bin laden xcept i aint in hidin or maybe sadaam hussein with fatalities in my brain quite possibly W.Bush controllin tha Hindu Kush like salt n peppas hook all imma do now is push, push i'm pushin 4 prominence pushin for complete dominance of my enemies and foes they such pitiful hoes *i got places 2 go i got people 2 see i'm comin 4 u hoes who decided 2 fuck wit me* i'll beat u right quick wit da Rodney knifestick den leave u in a ditch quiverin like a bitch i got places 2 go got people 2 see i'm comin 4 u hoes who tried 2 fuck wit me 1 can kiss my ass tha otha blow dick 4 runnin ya mouf fast u'll end up in a hole quick |
this was pretty dope. had a nice flow to it. i liked the rhyme scheme becuz it hlped the flow and was consistant throughout the entire verse and the scheme was pretty unique. the bars were also at good length in this one..were not stretched at all through out the entire piece. i couldnt really find any weaknesses except at a few points the flow was a bit off but not that often. next time you do a piece, i recommend you be more complex. it makes it fun to read and more people will want to reply to your work.
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aight dawg.........thanks 4 da feedback i'll keep dat in mind.
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aight dawg i'll hit up ya battles 2......thanks 4 tha feedback
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get up get on up mothafucka get up....get on up.........lol james brown in dis mothafucka..........uppin
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Pretty good key/freestyle man...Been really enjoying erthang you've been droppin dawg...This was some club/get hype shit...feelin the way the structure was set up...really helped the flow...Good shit man...1
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ok drop, you have a stable flow, bar's could be a bit longer. Good rhyme's in it. Few spot's you fell off a bit in the way of rhyme's.
. controllin tha Hindu Kush like salt n peppas hook all imma do now is push, push ^^ personnaly wasnt feeling tthese line's. overall, 6/10. keep dropping. |
thanx 4 tha feed homie....i'll hit u back wit some feed in ya open mic
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o my b dat wasnt yours u just posted in it......o well i'll return da fava wheneva
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