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2 my true love
To my true love i leave this last request:
that we meet one last time before i'm layed to rest Lord willing I leave this Earth peacefully Lord willing nothing comes between you and me Your eyes are luminous as is the morning star Your soul is the Sun shining bright from afar I am astounded by the ways you suprize me You stirr emotions of belovedness deep inside me Lips as gentle, as appeasing as the day is long You are the brainchild, purposeful being of my every song Words cannot express how i long for coming to When we meet I am rejuvinated with joy anew The shape of your body makes me steadily studder Not one syllable beyond "Damn" can i utter I leave this to my true love in the event of my demise Cry not for I will always be with you, I am the twinkle in your eyes The flutter in your precious heartbeat of which shall never end Forever I'll be with you, your confidant, your best friend For if I am gone, just look towards the stars, there you will find me This is to my true love, if I die, I left so no one can further bind me Do not mourn me for long, we shall cross paths again Some day, some glorious day, if only we knew when When we could be together, no drama, no stress I love you with all my heart, mind, soul, and flesh You are the reason for my being, as docile as a dove I want you to know how much i care,this is to my true love |
uppin damint....yall sure dont give poetry no feed
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hey this drop is pretty tight i like the flow it had to it keep up the good work aight peace
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^^ thanx 4 tha feed mayne, uppin.....................
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uppin..........................
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Flow fell off sometimes, rhyme scheme was consistent, work on ya vocab as well. Pretty good though, I actually thought of my gf, and how much I need to see her, so I like it. Keep elevatin dawg:thumbup:
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^^^i dont think nuttin was wrong wit his vocab very nice poem man
................fav part......................... To my true love i leave this last request: that we meet one last time before i'm layed to rest Lord willing I leave this Earth peacefully Lord willing nothing comes between you and me you did yo thang on dis one fam |
feelin this one right here. had nice flow to it but it did fall off here n there. ya my fav. part of this was the first 4 lines also. very good poem. return the favor and drop some feed.
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that is hot dawg, straight from the heart
nice flow and vocab was great |
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