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This Power Drunkened Society Compromises My Minds Sobriety
In MOck Piety A Scheme IS Devised to Wrench My-Life-From-Me
The Black Man...Earths First and Forgotten Son The Intellect Of HUmanity
iTs Such a Tragedy to Go from Imperial to Poverty,
.........................................Dubbed Nigger In Place of Your Majesty
Baffled by One Calamity after Another as We Tackle Lifes Upredictable Storm
HArsh Reality is Embraced MEan
...................While the Mythical Realm of the American Dream is Torn
Weary and Worn out Are My People Tired of Discrimatory Actions of Hate
Tired of Bowing Down To the Whip of Oppresion,Agression is all we been ...........................Shown So thats All We Can Immulate
Dying Spiritually My People Reach Out To Objects That Worsen There Predictament
Things such as Diamonds and Pearls Were a Africans House Hold Items,Now UP held With SUch Redicolous
Prestige...God HElp Me, Help Us.. For We Are Mere Men In Dire Need of Restoration
Bless are Nation of Brother and Sisters With your Salvation

uppin.....4..........more.............feedback

fix the structure.. flow went so so at times

but vocab was coo though..good at that

so i give you like a 7/10

ok thanx my niggas ill keep that in mind

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bad structure.... some filler, but overall, not the worst
keep it up, elavate

ROFL huh!?!?!.......................................... ..

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