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Cold Front
Cold Front (hail mary beat) All nouns no Verbs..no action all Words..no mammels all birds..cold fronts (repeat 3) Your not as Big.....known or cold..if you not have lived.. believe nobody would fuss..please warm over the colder front.. weather change,everyday,washway..this fake.. you have no control.....haven't you noticed you can't work alone.. you vernurable..If I catch you anywhere..and your homies gone.. you'd be plenty scared..anywhere,everyday..everywhere,anyday(repea t2) You not as big as your oppinion..your death..as insignificent as an apendix we see through your discuise..your never thought about droppin pounds you drop an ounce..you got aroused..getting purposly searched whenever a cop around nothing changes when your not around..maybe a celebration of releif I'd anounced you the grinch who stole halloween the way you taken falls.. your career lies in the balance..I couldn't wait to break it off.. your nothin but an irritation while in a body cast..I think I would laugh.. if someone would put more openings in you..then a tommy bag.. its kinda sad how you think or yourself as the king of anything.. your presense probably bring less change..then exhange a penny bring and pitty beefs..don't insinuate any street..don't pray for any peace you wanna unwine..then die on the frontline..go run indoors.. gonna have to leave sometime..and knock your house out..with one shot.. ..just stand in one line Your not as Big.....known or cold..if you not have lived.. believe nobody would fuss..please warm over the colder front.. weather change,everyday,washway..this fake.. you have no control.....haven't you noticed you can't work alone.. you softy..If I catch you anywhere..and your homies gone.. you'd be plenty scared..anywhere,everyday..everywhere,anyday(repea t2) go bunji jump usin a 20 foot rope..over a 15 feet bridge.. give you clown roses..there's a joke behind these tears but in another life..I'd cut your family to above the light how about I sea section your mother twice..no other rights the pendelum comes back..and no mercy here..it only holds one task believe that I won't laugh make cracks..I hate that I don't wanna do it..just the interest of payback..Expose the truth and threaten you on the same track..put it on repeat.. so the prediction plays back..your calm now..but I'll make you more laid back your marijuana seed want spread,you like a spaid cat.. you nuetured and soon to be nutrual..for being rude..and not giving coudous I'ma have to make wave patters with the blade..like fruityloops your body takes two to move..stand behind your world.. I thought that you knew the rules.. Your not as Big.....known or cold..if you not have lived.. believe nobody would fuss..please warm over the colder front.. weather change,everyday,washway..this fake.. you have no control.....haven't you noticed you can't work alone.. you vernurable..If I catch you anywhere..and your homies gone.. you'd be plenty scared..anywhere,everyday..everywhere,anyday(repea t2) You the Trailor..who still bragging..who's the butt of the jokes..although still laughin you get some luck at the most..you been sweating forever..I smell the musk on your clothes giving you acne I spot the pust on your nose..and the crust on your soap you want come..I don't give a fuck if you won't..but you know wassup if you don't the half asian..with blood..gonan look like mustard is on..there's no question you gone go home..and listen to this messege alone..and go to the cops..I'd be confesing alone I'm already around..I see you..already been found..look in the hallway there's hate only..This gonna probably be my 1st S-H-O-T...you change me and not for the good..and it haven't been done..and i'm not in your hood and I don't gotta gun..but go get a change of pants..and dry your shaking hands and the blueprint of your escaping plan..you should erase it man..remember Your not as Big.....known or cold..if you not have lived.. believe nobody would fuss..please warm over the colder front.. weather change,everyday,washway..this fake.. you have no control.....haven't you noticed you can't work alone.. you vernurable..If I catch you anywhere..and your homies gone.. you'd be plenty scared..anywhere,everyday..everywhere,anyday(repea t2) All nouns no Verbs..no action, all Words..no mammels,all birds..cold fronts (repeat 3) |
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yo mayn, i liked this. nice multie rymez mayn. fasho it wuz dope, werd
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yo this is dope, I see your still dropping your usual shit. man you gotta take these audio. Cause yo text is dope,can only wait for your audio.
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all I have to say is...your metaphors are untouchable...this was an extrememly dope piece...1...because of the in direct emotion that was portrayed...2...because it is surrounded by metaphors that all have relevant..and extrememly important significance to the piece.....i have nothing to complain about....the only thing i have to say from person to person..writer to writer...is...your way ahead of everybody here besides a few cats...and to express yourself with such depth...will only leave you unsatisfied if your looking for an understanding by your peers...because I promise you...this piece is way above the heads of many...but don't worry....i like to believe that the greatest unsuccess or failures..are that which are only unsuccessful, because the masses are not capable of comprehending...
that being said...dope drop...and please return the favor http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=169371 |
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. wow this is some nice feedback..........deserved by a nice drop. fam stay up dawg....... |
This was a very good piece here actually one of the best i seen on this website excluding mine haha, but anyways man your structure evrything was flawless keep this up.
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fuckin hes back mayn.....ok first of all the emotion was mad tight and then you had some tight metaphores...and shit the stucutre was good and it worked so well...you would be a good poetry hitter....you knah...but shit thats hot...check out my verse unsuitable life its around open mic some where...but shit man you have goteen better...good luck in the future...pz
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yeah dis was a dope drop I can relate 2 alotta da shit u sayin mayne. its alotta niggaz dats all talk. really feelin dis 1. ay return da favor dawg. 1.
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