An untitled Scripture
 

story about the man who was influenced by music and let it affect his life.....

He was on his samsung, iced out, listenin to rap songs
Tried to find himself but he was lookin at the map wrong/
Clapped on - gangsta - wanted to emulate the code
Stimulated woes, lead blindly thru simulated roads/
Integrated foes into his life, hes always shakin hands
Makin plans to be the biggest hustler thru forsaken lands/
Breakin grands, smokin and drinkin that henny ish
Down for change - but tryin to make more than 50 cent/
Many wish death upon em, froze wrists in his cold whips
Grindin with heat on the streets, stayed pushin those Clipse/
Oh shyt, he shootin? - hed diss idols - rip titles
His Lil Flip in attitude spoke a gameover for his rivals/
Which bible did he live by?, smoked meadows of cannabis
Street dreams to be a mob boss - status - ghetto and Fabulous/
Money and power fueled him, the danger got em shot up
Recovered and became Akon once he was locked up/
Discovered wisdom, no letters, hard labor, the food - ill
Became an artist that drew houses, drew trees, Dru Hills/
Accepted Christ, used to be the young cat makin the guns clap
Opened his eyes, stopped smoking Mary J, hes on a comeback/
Been there done that, dreamed hobbies of writin lyrical
Fightin spiritual, rhymed to the point he was citing mircles/
Spittin verbs and metaphorical phrases - his writtens burn
His soul star’d appeareances with Musiq - lyrically christened - nerd/
Kickin words thats Beyonce - Know les? - not with his destined knee
Whether happy or stressed, believed his liquid flow would bless the seas/
Finally, yes - released, proceeded to face rappers, calm but tensed
The resurrection of hip hop, thus started with his Common Sense/
This tree grows, now The Roots of devine lyrics and he knows
Soul machine, envisioned high hopes, no longer would Cee-Lo/
Once trapped as state property, esacped to freedom via Freeway
Soon he would x men with mental powers like a Jean Grae/
Peeps feelin em too, perfection forged from rap, rhythm and blues
Mission to lose? - nah - his legacy will shine cuz his glisten is new/
Feedin knowledge to the famished, these kids with a boney glow
Is it possible that he can end the K-os? - heaven only knows/
The ghost left his corrupted soul - reborn - takin his own steps
Is he the new danger to rap? - he replied…… Mos Def/

and always thank you for reading....

uppin for some feedback

ALL i gots to say welcome back and dope story script.




Nice multi'z, upp ya vocab a little. Flow was alright. Expressing it was good. The creativty of it, was good. I could picture that in my mind.

NICE DOPE STORY. 9/10

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back? i never left something...
but thanks for actualy posting FB
and thank you for reading

uppin for feed back

somebody post something and dont just look at it

dope !!

the topic is nice, multi's are dope. flow is good. I personnaly dont feel the way you used mainstream name's in it. that's not my style, but it's obviously your's and you used the name's to perfection.

good drop.

link's?

nice drop, i tried to flow it to some luda beats but it aint work lol
give it 9 out of ten

this wasnt one of the best oms

but it was decent,the imagery was vivid,the emotion was ok,you expressed the events nicely,and the structure was ok besides the /*s u dont need those so take them out next time,the vocab was good,and the word use was blah coulda done a little better,the concept was good...not played at all....overall this was a decent but yet good peace.......keep em coming


7.5/10

this some nice stuff....
your flow was real nice the whole way through, good job throwin some nice multis in there as well...
i think you went a lil bit overboard on usin the names of other rappers in it though, oh well, not too big of a deal...
real nice work here man...i was definetly feelin the topic too....
9/10

damn... this was pretty tight u werent lyin...... some people dont get it.... the name callin isnt necesarily his "style" its representive of how much he loves music and lives his life through music..... gettin so entranced by the music scene that he relates every even in his life to a song, because it is his life..... and shows how he takes the music so seriously and deeply that he is influenced by the words in the songs, and acts on this, even tho its not always the best thing like with the canibus/fabulous line (and like 50 cent and lil Flip mentions)..... ur closer was pretty good too i think........

i know u might be pissed that most people may not make that connection as i see above,, but i fopund it extremely dope and it is the best drop ive seen this month (and i mean in the past 30 days)

i also love how he seems reckless... maybe listenin to the wrong music or choosin the wrong role models and than he has the turn around here:

Discovered wisdom, no letters, hard labor, the food - ill
Became an artist that drew houses, drew trees, Dru Hills/

and than follows up later with the transformation... or i think.... i might even be wrong.... here:

Finally, yes - released, proceeded to face rappers, calm but tensed
The resurrection of hip hop, thus started with his Common Sense/

but anyways....... i thought this was one of the dopest OMs in a while

my first 10/10 even tho it pains me to ever give a 10 to anyone..... u tell me if i got anythin wrong by the way, but thats wat i thought

I think it was a str8 story had hell of good verses but not allot but keep elevating off of that so str8 all over.

9.7/10

Thanks for all the feedback i really apreciate it...



you got what i was trying to represent. And the bar:

Finally, yes - released, proceeded to face rappers, calm but tensed
The resurrection of hip hop, thus started with his Common Sense/

This is how he transformed into a beter emcce