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Acuity 01-03-05 09:12 PM

Love Is for Ever
 
Love Is Forever

Thanks to Love,I feel like I've touched and felt each and every individual star
Floated in the sky,Conversed with the constillations, travelled to random galaxies
Its as if ive laid to rest on the clouds, and condescendingly looked down
Upon the world, knowing that at these very moments i'm untouchable
Judging in contempt, those that stride before me like a ruler on his bench
I feel like in my palm I grasp an eternal flame, and no-one can dim its glow
Change its destiny, or listen and appreciate its tender movements and tones
In ur prescene i feel like light is shining out of each singular pore
Bathing onlookers in our spiritual,emotional, and physical bond, love for all
These reasons explain why my love is such are overwhelming powerful feeling
It cant be ignored, its so beautiful and natural, its like it has a power of healing
With its swift strike from Cupid's eye, it pushes people towards a better life
Causes many to make a sacred bond in our soul's epic journey or carriage
Embarking us on a life-long commitment, sworn by vows, to eachother in marriage
A gift bestowed upon us on by whoever it is that resides above
So valuable its priceless, symbolised by many by the morning flight of the dove
By the pure redness of the heart, but it cant be constricted in an internal body part
Our Love will survive, the apocalypse, the coming of the anti-christ, armageddon
It will last in the subtleties of the breeze when the seas with blood have reddend
When the barriers between the existing planes of life are destroyed and knocked away
Our Love will endure, and find a place safe, to ly in rest, prevail another day
Safely in the very grains of the soil beneath our feet, it'' be there in the times bitter sweet
With its magnificent strength and power, helping to complete the incomplete
It is going to guide us, light the darkest paths, aid us in our every endeavour
The before, is why love is eternal,unstopppabe,indestructible, it is why love is for ever

Acuity 01-03-05 09:12 PM

Feed It...........................

Parallel 01-04-05 06:32 PM

seems frimiler how ever you spell it but:

ok hmm that was tight i like your few last lines there....they were done well with vocab and your stucutre was tight....nicly flowing...maybe use multis give it mad flow i wanna do them to but its hard...but yea keep it up you had some good drop here...maybe we should collab i hear you got audio so we should do somin...but for your topicals keep it up your pretty skilled...8.4/10

look for my topicals i might throw them in my sig again but yea Unsuitable Life..check it if possible

Acuity 01-05-05 10:19 AM

fbak left Paralell thanks 4 ur feed man.........................bump...........

ILLunitic 01-05-05 10:21 AM

hot poetry fam i like t o see people get in touch with their inner feelings and bring them to life for us good looking 9/10

The Mexican 01-05-05 10:32 AM

nice drop on that. liked how it flowed. could've been a lil better w/ it but it still flowed nice. nice vocab on dat 2...pc

Acuity 01-05-05 05:00 PM

thanx 4 feed ppls............cud hav been a lil better what? u didnt say....lol

bump...

MC IgGY 01-05-05 10:14 PM

i liked how u used da vocab w/o makin the flow sounds bad
very nice overall

Acuity 01-06-05 05:49 PM

Quote:
Originally Posted by MC IgGY
i liked how u used da vocab w/o makin the flow sounds bad
very nice overall


^^weerd thanx 4 da feed man, :thumbup:
bump.........

~Lady Fiya~ 01-10-05 08:27 PM

nice poem, it's good to see a guy express himself through poetry.. this poem brings joy to any reader from the first line, that is, if they experienced love in a similar way you have.. you have nice imagery and energy pouring throughout this poem.. and you have a wonderful way of making a simple message sound appealing.. content is very well written.. i see you as one of the rv underdogs of poetry.. lol.. i would like to see another poem from you, some time.. keep at your works aight..

fluidmoon 01-10-05 09:18 PM

this was beautifully written,again i see you've let go and shown your emotional side, you have my vote for poet of the month so far, until i see anyone with as much skill then you, keep droppin....1


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