I Need Feedback on This
 

I need some support cuz my confidence is runnin short so expressing myself

in this song is my last resort, my main problem is rappin with no feedback

but i have to be on the right track, even if i'm not black, some might find me

good some might find me wack but no matter what i'll always strike back, i

hope ya'll feelin me because it isn't easy bein me, but i have to get this off

my chest i may not be the best and it's the time for me to work at it but i'm

not gonna go on without a hit, respect doesn't get handed over on a silver

plate but that's where u gotta spit shit where people can relate and it's this

mind of state that'll make ur skills great no matter how much people might

hate just keep your most important trait and spit it at a steady rate, and this

ain't just a song full of words it's truly how i feel and it's this kind of music

that people steal, but it's time for me to be real, no matter how much i have

to deal but all i want is for people to understand even if my shit does get

banned but it's rhymes like this that needs to expand and that's what i have

planned even if my shit's just a strand, everbody reads this and i don't know

why they never reply but i always try to fill these pages, even if i have to

forget about the guns and guages and beleive me i didn't stage this i just

speak the truth.

God Damn Fix Your Struture........................

thanx for remindin' me i just fixed it

nice word play but like I said before write in bar form meanin ur structure is all off

thanx for the tip unknown i know whats u talkin bout now but i accidently forgot bout the bar form i'll try that next time, i'm not really that expeirenced cuz i've i only rapped on here a few times as u could see