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monkeypoet 07-15-02 09:46 AM

letting you know
 
you cant accept me or anyone
for who they are or want to be
but i see that its time to stop lying
and let you see the real me

for me every day is acting
for i cant show my true feelings
the sadness i feel when i see a dead man on tv
or the anger i feel when i see a 11 year old boy doing dangerous dealings

the distress i feel daily
for what it seems no reason at all
the confusion that consumes me
when i ponder if will we all have to fall

but you dont care what i feel
because i am nothing to you
im just another errend to carry out
another child from another man you knew

you label all your children
and expect us to follow your guidelines
but im done watching
and seeing my life pass from the sidelines

you cant accept
anything that i am
well im going to tell you now
because your pressure has unlocked my dam

that i kept inside of me
all these long years
no more will i bottle my tru feelings inside
just so at night i can cry silent tears

but i cant find a way to let u know
because i cant just write this down and click 'send'
and come to think of it, i cant see
if these words even mean anything to you in the end

Calisto 07-15-02 05:53 PM

dis iz PAPISWIFEY im just on my girl's name cuz RB wont let me log in. but i thought dis was a tight piece and i was feelin it. i caint say i know exactly wherre ur comin from but pretty close. like i said dis was tight. keep it up. much luv and respect 2 ya.

one

monkeypoet 07-15-02 11:33 PM

papiswifey: thanks for the reply... im glad u can relate... it makes the poems more real if more peeps relate.. love to ya

JOeY TeRRIFYING 07-16-02 02:01 AM

this was anotha great drop. played your content out with great wordplay and imagery. its almost becomin a joy to read your stuff, cause rite now its just a pleasure. peace to ya.
joey

monkeypoet 07-17-02 01:26 PM

thanks joey, its nice to know THAT EVERYONE ISNT SLEEPING! lol... u always read it and i thank u for it...love ot ya

varentao 07-18-02 08:14 AM

this was a real heavy piece....the way you strucutre your pieces now make them even better to read...very well put...very strong emotions....and deep too..

.. - the phoenix is down, living in a hellish reality of ashes and dust and cold....but the phoenix digs deep....summoning power and the will to carry on...rising from the ashes to the fore...for it knows that no one can truly keep it down...for it is too strong...too 'GOOD' to do so... - ....stay strong monkey...and whenever you fall...dig deep within...summon that will and power you have...and rise from the ashes of desolate darkness....into the light that always shines bright...

..respect...

monkeypoet 07-18-02 10:22 AM

varentao: thank u from the depths of my heart... ill keep that advice with me for a LONG time... and as always, u support my poetry and i thank u for it... unline many others, u give tru advice on the piece, or how the person is feelin in general... thank u... love to ya

ShaYneA 07-18-02 10:49 AM

lovin your ish ma veery vrey well put together very well discripeted and overall awesome on teh fact that it was real .........'real' peices ar eoften mistaken in poetry as oh she wrote about it so she must have went through it.........NOT ALWAYS TRUE shizz i write about addicted babys and cracks addict moms but i never really went through that just my mind did .............but nice peice lady

monkeypoet 07-19-02 11:49 AM

ShaYnea: thanks for the reply... im glad u loved the peice...its just another form of writing when u write from someone others perspective... but thanks again, love to ya

[*¤ÐîMêØñФ* ] 07-19-02 12:06 PM

Dang gurl ...
This was sad ... one of those poems
im sure alot of peeps can relate to
well bit of it ...
Much props ...
Keep doin ur thang,
u got much talent dont go think its
not noticed..
pz
1luv dime
~1~

monkeypoet 07-22-02 10:08 AM

dime: thanks for the reply... im glad u enjoyed it...ur replys are always appreciated from me and i know i can count on u to sumwhat enjoy my peices.. love to ya


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