Pleim vs Youngsoulja
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 8 lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
3-0votes=KO

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 01-05-05 at 02:21 AM

Must drop verse in 60 minutes after check in.

YoungSoulja has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-05-05 01:23 AM.

Pleim has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-05-05 01:24 AM.

Youngsoulja please, man look, you are as whack as can be
But what you need to under-stand, is that you stand-under me
After this battle everyone is his crew will be saying they miss him
Cuz with his whack ass record even the system couldnt a-system
Look at this as learning you are simply and obviously worse
Even if you posted in Member Mugshots, noone woulda picture verse
Look man, what i do and what i did is considered quite a sin
you dont post with a countdown to drop, thats when you'll lose again

:laugh2:

i stand tall and crush you wit er'step of verb/
you pickin up a mic iz futile,like MJ askin out a girl/
welcome to mah world where da greatest survive/
da lord you might wanna ask to yo inurbane flow to
revive/
i see it through yo words dat you prespirin'/
now stop bein scared cuz yo fluids is leakin all over
RV's wirin'/
go ahead,call me a bully,but really im da commander in cheif/
you still think ders a god,den how come you just changed to no religous belief/

Voted For: Pleim

lol......Pleim just came harder in all aspects......overall i'd have too say......Pleim got this battle...harder punches,harder personals,,,alll that....better vocab and word play....so this battle would go all to Pleim....Young you need some elavating...your lines made no sense...

either dat or yo stupid azz need a damn dictionary
damn mah bad dog,im trippin wateva at least you voted

Voted For: Pleim

Opener - Pleim, was kinda wack but not as self-glorified as Youngs
Closer - Neither, they didnt make much sence, weak punch attemps
Punches - Pleim, Young threw them at himself
Personals - Neither, didnt see anything
Metas - Young, Pleim used none but Youngs was shit
Multies - Neither, saw none
Structure - Pleim, wtf is with Youngs
Vocab - Neither, both were elementary

Young: Elevate vocab, harder punches and structure
Pleim: Elevate vocab, Personals, and use more multies and Metas.

Overall I give Young a gracious 2/10 for the effort while Pleim sits with an hounest 4.5/10...well done, you got my vote...Next time try battlin someone in your own league. Payce.

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Voted For: YoungSoulja

you won. better punches and everything. Otha guy came weak no offense. I aint dissin you.keep rappin newbie. pc 1

Voted For: Pleim

pliem won this.. soulja, u gotta be a lil more creative and use some multis.. ur punches werent really hittin and werent really punches.. pliem didnt drop anything great.. mug shots line was nice tho'.. the wordplay in it was kinda played but u flipped it nicely..

vote = pliem

This was feedback posted for YoungSoulja
 

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Voted For: Pleim

YoungSoulja

i stand tall and crush you wit er'step of verb/
you pickin up a mic iz futile,like MJ askin out a girl/
^decent opener i guess

welcome to mah world where da greatest survive/
da lord you might wanna ask to yo inurbane flow to
revive/
^bleh @ first line, second is okay

i see it through yo words dat you prespirin'/
now stop bein scared cuz yo fluids is leakin all over
RV's wirin'/
^ok...

go ahead,call me a bully,but really im da commander in cheif/
you still think ders a god,den how come you just changed to no religous belief/
^nah, wasn't feeling your opener

First of all, fix your structure, up your vocab and i wasn't really feelin your flow. Didnt have any really hardhitting punches or personals in ya verse,some stuff didn't even make sense whatsoever but here and there you got shit that could be good so keep on doing your thing and elevate.


Pleim

Youngsoulja please, man look, you are as whack as can be
But what you need to under-stand, is that you stand-under me
^uhm,wasn't feelin the under-stand/stand-under-thing
but other thn that, decent...

After this battle everyone is his crew will be saying they miss him
Cuz with his whack ass record even the system couldnt a-system
^could've finished better

Look at this as learning you are simply and obviously worse
Even if you posted in Member Mugshots, noone woulda picture verse
^good one

Look man, what i do and what i did is considered quite a sin
you dont post with a countdown to drop, thats when you'll lose again
^okay closer

Structure and flow were definately better thn the other cat, vocab was okay...Didn't really have bold personals in there but you tried harder to bring him down with good punches. Keep on battling and read sum other stuff to help you out maybe.

No hate but my vote goes to Pleim

Voted For: Pleim

this was an entertaining battle, and thats being kind i think. The potential is there with both ya but there is some serious elevating to be done.

Pleim's best line: "After this battle everyone is his crew will be saying they miss him
Cuz with his whack ass record even the system couldnt a-system" -Good wordplay and good punch.

Pleim's worst line: "Look at this as learning you are simply and obviously worse
Even if you posted in Member Mugshots, noone woulda picture verse" -Maybe i didnt get it but i thought this was quite weak.

youngsoulja's best line: "i stand tall and crush you wit er'step of verb/
you pickin up a mic iz futile,like MJ askin out a girl/" this was ok i guess. bit of a metaophor going on and quite a good punch

YS's worst: "i see it through yo words dat you prespirin'/
now stop bein scared cuz yo fluids is leakin all over
RV's wirin'/" -an attempt at a metaphor but no quality in this really, punch was weak and failed to hit.

Overall Pleim's verse was a lot better. His use of wordplay was good and well-noticed and his punchlines were more clever and harder hitting. YoungSoulja may have had a bad battle but he will get better.