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Mage 01-05-05 10:47 AM

Ghosts.....
 
Murphy live's in a house that was once owned & inhabited by an old victorion era wealthy Irish family the year is 2003...After a few peculiar event's happening some decade's after the family's demise, Murphy look's up the history of the house..
To his amazement, he learn's the youngest of the deceased family died in a fire in 1854. Murphy rightly assume's the strange misplacement's and noise's are those of the children, he also learn's His ancestor's killed the children as the two family's were feuding over a unknown cause.
Nothing happen's over a period of 3 month's, so Murphy forget's about the ordeal only to come home after a hard day's work & while he doze's off, his desk drawer open's, by itself.

|...Overview...|
Scarred desk's absorbing history of event's cloaked in Darkness.
A pure figure fade's into the room, blanket's mobilized as a Harness.
Tightening my eye's i realise this is not a figament of my Imagination.
As the scenario unravel's, memory's haunted by sheer fear Contamination.


|...Waking up...|
Eyelid's reveal my sight, glance at my clock, 1:37 am..that time Already?
Stirring noise's fulfil the room, trying to maintain rational thought's Steady.
I suspend my logical thinking, to listen for the cause of the random Noise.
Rubbing my eye's..before me now stand's a young boy, in a exentric Poise.


|...Coming to Terms...|
Grappling my belief, to mould myself to believe this spirit is physical or Real.
Gut feeling wash's my stomach, brain stomach & gut's did not agree on what to Feel.
Just a white figure of a boy, gazing at me with sentimental glazed Eye.
Perhap's this was the place of residence before death, thathe never got to say Bye.
Overwhelming emotion's didn't know whether to scream or address the Spirit.
Glancing at the now ajar desk drawer to distract me, now wishing I was in It.


|...Spirits message and Departure...|
"Why are you here?"..i mumbled in a broken voice, "I live here" replyed the Boy.
His image defined itself as it spoke, with scabby shoe's, charred shirt & clutching a Toy.
"The fire....it killed me & my sister"...I replyed with "What's it got to do with me?".
The boy flipped into a rage, eye's aflare.."Yourancestor's did that to us you See".
Gut's somersaulting & flipping, fear swept my emotion's & stripped my Mind.
"So...so..so what you gonna do?" i sobbed, the boy rasped "Iv'e already done my damage i think you'll find."
Sharp shoot's spread through my abdomen, a kitchen knife impaled in my Stomach.
Thinking why hadn't i noticed, as i regurgitate my dinner and proceed to Vomit.
The boy chuckle's.."That's what it felt for me & my sister..we never stood a chance".
Hearing drowned out, respiration evading me, as i retained my eventual funeral's...Stance
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Mage 01-05-05 11:19 AM

Feedback please..................

Mage 01-05-05 12:49 PM

................................................Fe ed.

Tha Unknown (Uk) 01-05-05 01:07 PM

yo nice drop keep doin' yo think


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Acuity 01-05-05 01:08 PM

damn fam u came strong......gd story was feelin it....was a propa topical it flowed and told a tale...can see you put some effort the fact you did this in under a day is dope...nice vocab and flow..but no h8 mage ur structure was fucked lol...but it didnt damage ur drop.............9/10 Peace :thumbup: keepin dis up reppin the crew hard...

Mix & Match 01-05-05 08:40 PM

Yessssss sir.

This was a good drop. Shit if you get bored anymore, your gonna be owning this om place. haha.

Vocab, imagery, flow were all there. Which made this a great job as usual.

Good job fam!

ChaoticStealth 01-05-05 08:46 PM

damn man that was good drop, good flow and nice vocab as acuity said, haha and like he said just need to polish the structure a little but that was dope man, props

Mage 01-06-05 11:20 AM

Thanx for the feedback.......

Mage 01-07-05 12:01 PM

Feedback please, don't sleep.

intensify effect 01-07-05 12:15 PM

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