Explizit* vs Pleim
 

Battle Rules:

12 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 01-08-05 at 07:23 PM

Must drop verse in 45 minutes after check in.

Explizit* has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-05-05 07:25 PM.

The only one that is whack here is you/
You spit queer things that are dramatical/
Calling people whack is as whack as can be/
That’s whacker than your mom masturbating me/
I’m god and in my face you’re going to come and sin/
I’ll send you to hell when I win so just quit/
Nigga you better listen to your system/
I’ll destroy you like the Assyrians religion/
What 1 times 2 minus three stupid/
Its negative 1 that’s the wins you be losing/
Now what my pointer finger - the other 2/
If you don’t understand it means fuck you/

why did you quit. You shoulda checked in hoe.......

Pleim has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-06-05 07:12 PM.

Man, even if I TRIED I could never be as whack as you are
Cuz even with one in your name, you can never be a star
E's on my nuts, I should probly call this fag my personal groupie
Cuz look he wouldn't even be explizit working on a porno movie
Punch after punch on the face, just so I can get to my point
See imma "Dec" Explizit harder than the month that he joined
Keep fuckin with me man, and best believe you'll get popped
I'll have the Maxwell up in ya throat but it aint a coffee shop*
Look at my verse dawg, you can feel the punches hit hard
But you "can't bring heat" like delivery boys with broke cars
But imma stop now man, cuz to me this aint even right
Cuz what it all "boils" down to....is me eating you alive

*Maxwell=Mac swell

Voted For: Pleim

Vote for pleim, um Explicits barely rhymed, which believe it or not, is a key aspect.

Also the punches and personals were more developed in pleims verse.

It's ok if you keep practising you will catch on.

Voted For: Pleim

Aiight, I think Pleim got this battle easy. Explicit, your gonna really need to work on your shit before you go battling again man.. Start reading text from some of the doper people on this site and try to elevate a bit..

Pleim, you can aiight I guess, some punches were played, but you definatly managed to pull off this battle. So thats why yuo get my vote.
v/ Pleim.
Peace.

chea uppin dis shit for votters
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This was feedback posted for Pleim
 

Voted For: Pleim

lmaoooooo u took dis 1 easy.....ex ur shit was 2 basic no punchlines no multis no personals..step dat shit up fam 4 real

opener-ple
structure-ple
punchlines-ple
creativity-ple
multis-nun
wordplay-nun
personals-ple
finisher-ple
enjoyed-ple...nuff said u won dis shit only thing i aint like about ya verse is ya ryhme scheme

LINKS R IND A SIG RETURN DA FAVOR YA'LL

Voted For: Pleim

have to go with pleim I think he just came harder he had harder punches, more peronels and his opener-closure could use some work but it worked for me. But no hate just keep elevating homes.

PLE

Man, even if I TRIED I could never be as whack as you are
Cuz even with one in your name, you can never be a star
E's on my nuts, I should probly call this fag my personal groupie
Cuz look he wouldn't even be explizit working on a porno movie
Punch after punch on the face, just so I can get to my point
See imma "Dec" Explizit harder than the month that he joined
8/10

EX

The only one that is whack here is you/
You spit queer things that are dramatical/
Calling people whack is as whack as can be/
That’s whacker than your mom masturbating me/
I’m god and in my face you’re going to come and sin/
I’ll send you to hell when I win so just quit/
Nigga you better listen to your system/
I’ll destroy you like the Assyrians religion/
7.6/10

hit up on my links peace

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iight letz get summre votes in diz bitch..........

Voted For: Pleim

Pleim u got this E-Z.................
opener-Pleim
structure-pleim
punches-pleim
multis-n/a
flow-pleim
explizit that shit is weak dogg
I could do better than that
Its so confusing, u need to work on structure
so ppl actually understand sometin
~payce

Voted For: Pleim

both had good structure. i give punches to pleim even though porno jokes are kinda played but that was a good and unexpected use of it and it became a good personal. The coffee shop joke was pretty good but the delivery joke killed the verse kinda. Ex had the vocab clearly but that alone won't win it. Neither had multis. but pleim won.
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