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victims of nature
this is a short one ...... drop sum feedback plz
once again innocent people have past away no one saw this comin on such a regular day this aint war , its just a battle against nature a warning system could have saved some now 2girlz and baby brother livin without a mother she tryed to run before the destructive wave caught her they had a chance to look for higher spaces dead body's over few 100 maybe 1000 acres whole family's were ripped apart children livin as orphins with a broken heart Now let us have a moment of silence they in a better place ...under gods guidance New year ended up a huge tragedy grip your hands 2gether & say a prayer with me its a miracle for those who made it out alive printed on their minds .... means TRAUMATISED for LIFE |
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that was kool man
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Nice joint,,,7.9/10
Your best lines,an a great opener to once again innocent people have past away no one saw this comin on such a regular day this aint war , its just a battle against nature a warning system could have saved some |
iight kool mayne
ty for the feedback ............still uppin comon |
yo WTF
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yo i liked it i felt ya emotion did u make this up or is it some real shit either way its good nice structre and flow rhymin was good too....7/10
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ty mayne ....this sum real shit
its bout that tsunami at asia .........uppin |
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You need to broaden your emotion's, some line's just really were not needed like the "dead body's over few 100 maybe 1000 acres" line, just seemed like you ran out of idea's and just put that there...overall it's good because it's simple and let's you think about it more...just improve your vocab, and emotion's.
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yo wut up with this shit
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yeah that was tight ...i liked the structure and the vicab was decent...nice job tho!!!...gd gd
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