Ultimate Rhyme Slaughter!
 

bring me my opostion i know he aint no competion start a peteion cause
im a carzy mother fucker on a mission listen get a decsion/
let me put shit in perspective ive been tested gone aganist the best'N
my rhymes is still affective/
they commandin outstandin u on a high when i u hear me spit u go on a
crash landin/
theres no way that ure gonna survive i derive fans across the nation
they respect my creation a hip-hop dictation a tremendous rhyme
formation people tryin to disscredit me like a kobie rape allagation
all ya bitches that told me to start an elevation check this shit
i bring a devestion expell all expection i got the rap equation
heres an explation i paint with words an illastration
i bring all the information in my flow it goes easy like lubraction
u like bill muray lost in my translation of litagation no limatation
give me a nomantion for open mic of january cause i got a sick
presentation u got no point like the next source publication
i bring it straticilly it seems to me u got no imagination/
u cant cohmprehend my style listenin to ure shit isnt worthwhile
i spit vile with an artistic style u fuckin around like an autistic
child/
any one who looks at me and aint showin respect or reject my project
just rember my rhyme slaughter

holy shit....soem very godo liens in there...

you were very creative in vocabulary and multis very nice i liekd this line at best:
i bring all the information in my flow it goes easy like lubraction
u like bill muray lost in my translation of litagation no limatation

^^and also you had a alright stucture coulda been fixed...and damn again ncie vocabulary and some very creative lines in there with wordplay...very creative man....good luck...8.5/10


return the fav in the link in the sig my real names parallel ight

pz..

-Parallel

uppppin.....................thanks homie ill check out ure open mic....

uppppppppin.......................................

feedback peeps....................................

u have 24 hours to drop a link or this will be closed....
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=170871

Lyrics:good
Structure:iight
vocab:dope

overall good drop,very good,yoiu elevated for sure man

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1879298
heres my link....

this was alright! it was hard to tell where the lines started and ended. work on speratin yur lines so wecan read the rhymes easier! once i figured it out tho it was tight nice vocab fo sho!

thanks yall...................

upppppppppppppin dont sleep.......................

thanks for droping a link with PROPER FEED BACK.....

i will remove my thing from ya verse now....

have a good day....

i think u got confused with what i said.....

i said thanks for droping a proper feed back....

and i removed what i had in ya verse.....

there was noting wrong with ya link or feed back thanks for following the rules N droping a proper feed back...

uppin.............................................

Alright Nice Shit Fam, Creative Lines You Got. You've Much Elevated From My Point Of View, Keep Dropping Fam. Peace.