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Mage vs Cuban~Storm
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10 line min-20 line maximum. No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting No Feeding Topical Battle..Topic Is-Nature. Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 01-08-05 at 02:25 PM Must drop verse in 1440 minutes after check in. |
Mage has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-08-05 01:56 PM.
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Cuban~Storm has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-08-05 01:57 PM.
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|...The Scene...| Wilted flower's droop to the breeze of whisper's of air. While basking in the elusive lord's retreat namely his lair. Hand's carved scenery to reincapture mind's and display perfection. Untouched stationary's slaving to rid evil & enforce correction. Tree's wilt and shadow the soil, to discreet plantation birth. Scene's untouched by men alike, no wound's on bark for axe's to insert. Landscape's provide haven for animal's to bask in god's glory. Mind's unravel upon presence of nature, a heart-felt story. Bush's twine and twist amongst trunk's, & array's of petal's. Non-industrialist, sweet oudor's instead of molten metal's. |...Human Influence...| Nature hidden away from the malicous pupil's of destruction. To halt the advance of tree-cutting, and soothe tree dweller reduction. Motion's of the air affect action's of petal's & illuminate the horizon. While nature's imagination's direct anger on lumberjack's, and despise-em. Tree bark withhold's spirit's and embossed image's of entity's. Seducing colour's fulfill flower formation's & highlight natural remedy. Pilgrim's scripture's bestowed in nature's tool's and reserve's. Blossoming taking place, and vine's galavanting with olive's & herb's. Vision's of natural waste, & every tree death & animal fatality's. ...Shatter as my mind slip's back to life, & persistent reality's. |
Nature
Nature in God’s eyes is way more different then how we picture it We feel like we received such a curse, but a gift is what we’re living in Walking through the desert, no rain, mirages flooding through my mind Waterfalls falls on me, wit a sprinkle of reality now that I realize Step by step, I break some sweat, and I end up crawling to a state of rest Exhaustion...too hard to deal with, for I feel such a weight on my chest Looking up I see *desert eagles* vultures circling above me Spread ya wings, eyes in one direction while the sun rays falls upon me Still looking around, no water left in sight Yet so hot during the day, and so cold throughout the night Lifes a game, and we’re all in a position of nature’s play Life is wonderful, nature is the same, even when night turns into day One after another swoops down on a victim of the sun While I’m watching down on him like when I was once done...gone I notice that nature was like my own trife life Remembering that was me, and I play apart of nature’s circle of life |
.........Good drop, upping this for vote's....fucking 50 characters.
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^^ u prewrittin bastard lol j/k...nice drop dawgs...uppin
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Voted For: Mage
Ok battle. Mage- I can't wait to battle you. Good piece. Good imagry, vocab is good, some multis, and good story line. Flow was pretty good, I enjoyed this piece. Cuban~Strom- Ok piece. Imagry is ok, but your structure wasn't that good, and the flow fell off too many times. Overall I felt your imagry and your vocab was not as good as Mage and that is why you lost. v/Mage px |
Upping, been a while and still.....one vote.
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This was feedback posted for Mage
Upping this, fucking ridiculous.
Fucka 50 characters. |
uppin for some votes wow vote..............................
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upppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp................. ........
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This was feedback posted for Mage
i al ready voted on here damn......................
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Pretty old thread here..............................
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