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paints pictures of poetry with explovise imagery,
verbal techinque display endless energy,
cilps in my mind make thoughts come out photogenicly,
niggaz pop off tops, as if they were in infrantry,
but we pop tops off henessey drinkin off bad memories,
fakes one disguise, thats why we diss these guys,
they can be 2 peepo, im one-of-kind,
im in gods hands, but he played my card,
gambled with my life, had a bad wreck in the car
heart beating hard, breathing 5 times a second,
off on the road head covered with ketchup,
body smothered in glass, havin flashbacks, of mom holdin my hand, another one of my damn stepdad smackin me bad,
my girl throwin fits and fists, and my clothes out with the trash
woke up, seen lights and my stepdad waz holdin my hand,
hurt critically, tryna to get out from unda da van,
i blinked once, only to end up in a hospital bed
moms was cryin........she was holdin my hand
my girl ran in, face saturated, had my bag of clothes but my eyes was closed,
dad was devastated his look just froze
doc came in and said i was ready to go
put my clothes on, head out 4 the door,
only to see my image headin out to the door,
i was scared for a minute i was outta my form,
outta my body, i wasn't prepared to see my soul
blacked out again, repetitvie flashblacks remeberin when.....
me fightin this kid , givin shots to the chin, arguin with my fam,
slappin my girl, stealing my moms van,
woke up seen a light and god was holdin my hand,
looked closer, horns was growin the side of his head,
background got red,
hellbound, damn, i was already dead

nice shit homeboy..very nice

the vocab at the start of this was heavy but then u sorta started usin loadsa simple vocab. subject i was feelin u gettin sum mad imagery goin. the structure tho sumtimes was a bit loose and didnt always work still a nice piece overall check mine ninja philisophy aight cuz one