What Am I Sayin?
 

i black out wit futuristic technological skill//
methodically leavin u wit an untouchable, uncomprable feel//
intergalactic lyricist murdering the complexities of earths existance//
causing all rational sense laying aside with natural logistics//
bending time's frame work manipulatin every' human's verse//
a knowledge traced with a cell creating the birth of earth//
rapped in the seed of 1 man's seed, the verbal fatalistic messiah was born//
cryin in swarms of those in opposition, to the eternal fire that scorns//
flames of hate engulfing sub zero tolerance wit destruction//
causing epidermus to shred, bodies with no shell causing corruption//
silenced by the plateua of media that gave him his speech//
longing to set fire to the windpipe ceasing all of the wisdom he preech//
cyborg tactical plans applied for the assasination of the king//
police corps advanced to police corpse is an unexplanable thing//
terrorizing terrorists for causing terror in those who seak peace//
dna stem analyzine reached,gentiles recreating beleifs//
seeing the blind with invalid eyes, irises burned by rage//
pupils the leading light through closed eyelids turned upside down by haze//
not even i know what i'm sayin now has human exploration levels been reached//
creating the blueprnt and rode map to the universe, and my verse wont be peeped//

holla at this kid, 1luv.

ummmmmmmm ok

here we go

i like the rhymes

and i like the vocab


just post this in the logival threead to see wat the others think aight

that shit is tight dawg, im down for that shit, i totally dug tha vocab. u jus need sum punchlines and metaphors but im assumin u bring that shit in battles.
im down for this cat joinin.
Peace.

okay so it was peeped but im still bein slept on, 1luv.

A good all round knowledge shown with the strong vocab, but this had no substance didnt seem it was going anywhere... The flow was sturdy, good use of multies, lacced some internal rhymes, but it was working... Vocab was obviously your strongest point, I think ya need to tone it down slightly... Wordplay was laccing aswell would like to see more metas and similes, its a solid piece though, keep spitting and elevating...

Peez...

thanx, elevatin...1luv.

shit, i was feelin that, like mad, you got's crazy vocab... i'm def down for you bein in the crew...

^^^good look could i get some general feedback??? 1luv.

well u be sayin some crazy vocab like burnin said....lol..some of those words i didnt even know..nah but nice shit fa real playa...keep spittin tho...

oh yea well u check out one of my drops...ghetto is as ghetto live....thanx..pz~1~

thanks elevatin

elevatin, please dont sleep

elevatin