Battle Me or Raddle Me
 

[COLOR=Lime]So this is the way I've been rhymin it must be the the best(yes), unless you come up with sumthin betta I won't be impressed, my success will make you confess your manhhods a mess, If I miss with the right then I''l connect with the left, and I'll fight through the night, I just might go psycho. Like my blunts that are tight rolled nicely with hydro, I know I'll make your face white like you seen a ghost while I blowin that dro out the nostrils of my nose......... :shoot:

yo u's good u should continue writin' but da problem is dat it's kinda short so if u make 'em longa dat'll be betta yet and your's made lots sense but not all of it so make sure of dat too and ur structure is a bit off if u need help on knowin' how to fix ur structure or even knowin' y there's anythin' wrong wit ur structure then ask somebody dat seems expeirenced trust me i got lots of shit 'bout my structure when i first started too