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My Pain - King~~Dipset
Ayo If ya Feelin How im feelin rii Bout Now Then Jus Tell Me You Wit me
yo yo Ma pain and depression just cannot be dis-missed Its sad but its tru that I go thru all this shit All the sadness and the misery puts me in the pits of hell Many people know my childhood didn’t go to well But still they have to go to other people and tell It just drives me crazy, how ppl think this just a phase I be (in) Right now my current lifestyle is just a tragic sin Evry nite I pray 4 better Dayz, but the trouble never goes away It always stays Evry time b4 I go 2 sleep I worry dat silence will come & creep It will b ma last breath da very next mornin ma fam will find me dead because I’ve gone 2 rest Now thru of all the drama misery and stress And on that final day when I enter the gates The lord will be there – there to set me straight Wonder if death will ever become my fate Or if I can just stay on earth with my people and wait Up there they wait for my arrival while I have survival Rite now, I currently have no denial, I admit all the anger inside jus come n spirals Right now I’m so pissed I rarely see the point to smile While, all the while, some ppl jus reading ma file Bcuz The Life I been Livin Is Jus filled With Ak'z 47'z and tech'z If feelin How Im Feelin Then Jus Throw Up Ya Respects Plz Drop Some Feed Favor will be Returned |
Cmon Yall Pplz Lets Get some Comments And Feedback Up In Here
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i think its cool i'll say
8/10,fasho |
Thanx Mayne./..........................Uppin And Im Lookin for Some Feed Not a rating But thanx n e wayz
Uppin FAVORS WILL BE RETURNED OR MY NAME AINT .......................well you dont Need to Know what My Name is So Uppin |
Come Yall We Uppin Up In This Bitch So Give me some Goddamnit................Uppin
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wud up King aight lets start wit da flow it was a lil off on sum place your lines was short and den some was real long which was why the flow was messed up nice piece doe nice topic could of showed more emotion but it was but it was decent ill give it a 7/10
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aight man..this was a nice drop.....the concept was good...and it was real...which i loved about it....was really feelin the pain in there....wot u been through and stuff...and tlkin bout ya life n stuff...overall this was good to read...the only thing i will say is tht ur structure was off...u need to keep ya lines about the same lenght..or at least the bars......people will enjoy it more then cos they can catch a flow n makes it easier to read...but u'll pick up on tht...anyway.....part from tht..good job..ama keep a lookout for more stuff from u...keep em comin man..pz
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It was, down to Earth, unlike some of the plots and concepts that other emcee's have been trying to come up with. It was straightforward and it worked well to your advantage, if anything my advice would be to work on your structure, that way your flow will come into play alot bettter. Then, you won't have such a jumbled verse. Good job.
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stop rappin cuz...dis was garbage as hell...retire, fag
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You must drop a link to an Open Mic you posted Decent feed on or this will be closed. |
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Mayne When You Stop Dick rYdin Then Ill Retire ....................which is neva Ill Post Some links Now |
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Aii We Uppin Up in This MOFO ............................. Drop Some Feed And Plz If any Suggestionz Too.
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ay...dis shit is pretty hot my nigga...i gives it a 7/10...ay, keep dis shit up and i'll be lookin for yo shit 4real...~1~
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Tnanx Mayne ............................Aiii Yall Uppin Fo some mo
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