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Detrimental 01-12-05 01:58 AM

Song For My Girl (Best Love Song You'll See on OM)
 
Uncontrolable, unconditional, and deep love for my dear Ashley
Swearin i see a halo above you every time you walk past me
You the only one who can make me happy if you ask me you're amazing
Maybe crazy but when i'm with you it's really hard to stay me
My heart was aching for you baby my one and only girl
I swear to everything and my life that you're everything n my entire world
My stomach twirls it spins it twists it turns
When i'm with you my hearts stiff when i'm not it burns
At first i wasn'y sure if it was love but now i'm certain
You're perfect and i know we was put together for a purpose
Without you i would've never even found my way to the surface
You were worth it worth the pain worth the searchin
You that special person my significant other
Love i wouldn't know what it mean without you i really meant i love her
My life my lover no one i see above her we go togther like 2 turtle doves
And for ever always carved in my heart...Unconditional Love


Unconditional Love which stays carved in my heart
With these words i put into rhymes they are art
The art of love you're my present who came from above
And bein with you i can never get enough



I want you to listen i'll never leave you to be a rap musician
The story will end hapilly never twisted me not lovin you is fiction
I have visions of us kissin bein happy for the rest of our lives
And the love i have for you can't be expressed with words or rhymes
Words can't define my feelings i love you more than i can explain
Before you came i could never see clear through all of this rain
But i have a clear view even more clear when i'm near you
I'm here to keep your life happy i'm sincere too
I fear to have people gone that are important
You've always been there and i thank you for it
With you problems are easy sortin out my love is not deductible
our love put together has always been undestructible
I thought me bein with you was only a fantasy
Now we're together forever can't wait for the future family
And i know a lot of dreams have been shattered
But now that i'm with you them things don't even matter


Unconditional Love which stays carved in my heart
With these words i put into rhymes they are art
The art of love you're my present who came from above
And bein with you i can never get enough


I know i've done stupid things and tears fell from your eyes
But all that is over now let's put that aside
True love is hard to find but mine has been found
Never knew what love was before we went out
So many lifeless screams, so many untrue dreams
Now we're together i finally know what feminen means
You only can feed my needs of happiness
Before this i was never having bliss
Love, having this is heavin
I swear that day i asked you my palms was sweatin
That supposed to be lettin you know how nervous i was
It's crazy, finally happiness is constantly serving us
Never hurting us but only constant pleasure
X marks the spot and i've found my treasure
I've wrote so many love letters but never containin this stuff
Forever always will i have Unconditional love


Unconditional Love which stays carved in my heart
With these words i put into rhymes they are art
The art of love you're my present who came from above
And bein with you i can never get enough

Detrimental 01-12-05 02:09 AM

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post1889798

Detrimental 01-12-05 12:03 PM

i need some feedback people!!!!! damn no one gives any feedback.....annoying shit!

The Militant 01-12-05 01:41 PM

thats was preety good...good emotion i worte somethin for a girl that i was datin and when i read it to her she got so happy and cried...if u havent already u should show it to her yall probaly get somethin :)...got rhymin to structre was good..the hook was put together well... return the favor in one of mine...

Detrimental 01-12-05 11:29 PM

nah man i'm recordin that shit! lol thanx for the feedback....i'll leave some feed on yours in a bit

Detrimental 01-12-05 11:31 PM

thanx
 
nah man i'm recordin that shit! lol thanx for the feedback....i'll leave some feed on yours in a bit
uppin for more feedback

Ic3Y_Sw33tG 01-13-05 10:07 AM

Quote:
Originally Posted by Ruffridah187
nah man i'm recordin that shit! lol thanx for the feedback....i'll leave some feed on yours in a bit
uppin for more feedback


Yo dawg that was some emotional verse, good hook and rhyming do what you got to do.

SR$ 01-13-05 10:52 AM

fuck yall pussy ass bitches...this shit was garbage...retire


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