No Sense of Reality
 

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Wheres the normalcy, when im ordering to go back to the stage
Surpassing each page in thought but im still reenacting the play
Enraged at false obstacles, overwhelmed and still causing stress
Pausing less now rewinding as another plot that im tossing next
Actuality and imagination cross and have me to stand confused
Persisting n’ landing through another heist or help a man abused
Stopped and caused hundreds of terrorist attacks just lying in bed
Prying in heads so im not let out of this world of writings in lead
Life must go on but references still reminds me of rights n’ wrongs
Nights so long in this world of good and bad ma real life is gone
Dullness’ arises, I insist that im more then what passion suggests
With elaborate sets n’ going through scenes some as bad as it gets
Im not happy just yet and I know there has to be more to explore
Bored with the wars so I fly with the birds n’ I soar with just four
More ideas and journeys enter my mind, n’ I just need to escape
Pleading for days to stay in a forged world I could see as of late
Cant stay idle in imagination that never ceased to relieve the truth
When beneath the roof I was important n’ I was neva leaving too
Mind always concealing rules, n’ this world was my missing piece
Listing these and showing the only time freedom was shifting free
But why does the norm scare me, n’ why can I not live like the rest
Cant get rid of reject, shunned n' not living to values within the best
If im really an underachiever, I cant see what was there to achieve
Cant bare to believe reality cuz wats there im too scared to perceive

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aight..i was feelin this drop...first off.....the structure was spot on....made it so easy to read.....as for your verse.....the concept was good....dnt think i seen one like tht before...it was real..people will feel tht...some of your vocab was brilliant too...some nice use of wordz in there.....overall a very good drop...ama rate this one...errrrr..9/10...ama keep an eye out for more ur work too...keep em comin mah...pz

return the favour with some feed in ma open mic to if you dont mind please....

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i did drop a link its at da top

ight first of all you were very emotional with threw out vocab threw the whole verse very good lines perfectly stucture and the flow was good...i liked the style and the creaticty you had to your lines very well done verse....keep doing your thing and you'll get better....i was feeling the verse more to the end then the top tho....but it was all good, good verse...

holla at me if you want to collab some time...you got talent...

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