mad punches, crazy lyrics, dope shit (13 bar freestyle)
 

aight, yall emcees got skills...HA! SYKE...
your more pussy than a set of twin dykes...
i'll brake ya face like i'm clutchin mics...
ya get ''rode on'' like the town byke...
...but if u wanna get serious, then homie just holla...
cause ya rhymes'll get u as far as bein in bloomingdales with a dollar...
i'm a rap scolar, graduated at birth...
the ''warrior'' of this game claimin all the ''turf''...
i was put on this earth cause god couldnt be everywhere...
you'd think i got a dick on my head cause chicks forever stare...
it starts with hoes bradin my hair then next comes the ''nookie''...
like a japanese hooker trynna talk english bitch you ''sucki sucki''...
i'll tear at ya limbs like a cookie n have ya crumbs all over the place...
my shit bangs at ya eardrums like u got headphones blastin bass...
similiar to mases eyebrows you niggas cant see me...
like the tsunami my flow kills n causes catastrophe...
my doggs blasphemy(blast-fa-me) so sound ya sirens like the ''wun-time''...
yall gon' miss me cause when i';m gon ''there aint no sunshiiiiine'' (haha)
man i got mine, but i want yours...
so bend over n get finger fucked by my texts like lyrical whores...
now lets take this to the stage n watch me ripp out ya vocal cords...
wrap em round ya throat n watch this people scream encore...
the blood spills, the spine chills i clap n kill....
slap u for thrills n have you in fits like u took 26 pills...
like an ugly kid lookin in the mirror, i wont hesitate to brake you...
with ya whack verses, call me director cause i'ma let yall have ''take-two''

hmm damn homie you rusty......your stucture and flow are still the same but its like you lsot the vocab and the art of creativity...
NAH
wtf! am i talking about...but you are a lil rusty but not bad in a few dropes i think you'll get better then you were before...but yea man good flow and your creativity was alright not the best it could be but it not bad....jsut try working on it a lil more....
but overall pretty good verse...
i aint rating anyone no more so dont ask please...
it was great:thumbup:

return the feed in my OM's links in the sig...

-Parallel

this shit was sorry...you gotta be straight fag for shit like dis...fuck you...retire, sooner better than later

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Thanks for that feed back Dog!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

what the hell?
whatever man.....

uppin for feed, an parrarell, good lookin' homie