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---Down and out...deep ass callabo feat.Acidic, Lack Of Logic, and Damani-DaGrinch---
Acidic:
ayo livin in tha hood havin no job means bein broke 99% of tha time// wen we needed money i had food stamps in my hand but to sell em i needed to stand in line// every time i wanted somtin i had to go and be grimey// sneaky on tha streets kept it cool cause tha cops were always behind me// tey were always watchin me from wen i came out my house till i went in// i always eluded tem wen it was time for din din/(dindin=dinner) tats wen i would go and steal from tha mart// always havin a head start// of gettin away from tha cops// runnin as fast i can i aint gonna make no stops// till i get home and change my clothes just so i could do it all ova again// but i kno if i get caught im gonna be spendin time in tha pen// although bein broke has its benefits it also has its downfalls// tha tenement buildings r ovacrowded and we got children yellin across tha halls// and bein a child of 3 has its difficulty wen bein raised by a single parent who work 3 jobs and doesnt even see her 3 kids// but she always has money to put down and bids// she wins and she losses and comes home at night wit either a happy face or a sad one// but wit tha money she had left she went and bought a gun// she got tired of bein borke all tha time and she committed suicide so she could be free from bein broke// not long after 2 of tha 3 kids had a heat stroke// and passed away and tat leaves me all alone in tis hood// but being broke im doin good// Lack of Logic: It’s a sad way- to awake at the break of day- in a subway- cold as fuck being called earths decay-this empty bottle of E and JAY-clouds what I have to say- it aint like the earth cares- anyway- no health care- and to poor for welfare-ma said god would be there- but I don’t see him or feel him-plus my body’s slim- from famon-the drink empty to the brim- I cant fathom-and my guiding lights dim- I feel better when I feel sick- tried suicide- but cant even afford a razor to do it with-as life passes bye- I ponder is my purpose to take time and then die- not leave anything behind- to be identified-if you look in my eyes- You could see hope and promice- drugs and narcotics- an escape way through a gate way drug Im trying to be honest- This drug is satans influence- I sin and cant offer repentence- this is my life my cell and im serving my sentence- Low label products- corrupt cops – sun burns from sleeping on black tops-I here guns pop- and hydrate myself with pepermeant shnoptz- Home is a battle field older then the sneaks on my feet- admit defeat- relying on burning garbage cans for heat- Soda pop cans at 5 cents a peace- might gaurentee me a bath and place to sleep- But you don’t know that or never will-to feel your will- snap in 2 peaces each day to repeat it the next day that’s real- To you as well as myself- im 4 steps from seeing heaven while im laying in hell- in foul body smell- I feel compelled- to tell- the story- HI~S~TORY of my journey- from purgatory- that led me to a gurney- 2 degrees from lights out-listening to doctors scream and shout- no one wanted to help me out- was not insured and only had a dollar amount- and doctors don’t give discounts- god took mercy so to give me an answer- on weather I should give up hope he diagnosed me with cancer- im gonna die soon I knew this with no delaboration-all these complications- and I cant afford the medication- but im no different than you beautiful people- im as ugly as you are to me so in a way we still equal- and 2 equals equivilate to 2 flatlines- one that was my mind and one was just my time- as I laid down to this rest- with only a vision and a few rags to my chest- kept the warmth I could with only wine to dijest- I could feel death’s breath on the back of my neck- I want to die with respect- so let sleep with the blessed-never wake up again…. no where is woarse…. I thought as my spirit left. Damani-DaGrinch: Why is it so hard, livin in this world without scrillz// I have a hard enough time affordin another meal// without having baby moms on my dick bout child support billz// whoever said every man was created equal wasnt poor// he never had to sneak bread and meat out the grocery store// the worst times gotta be them cold ass nights// poverty has no prefrences foy black or white// where is this god that was suppost to be right by my side// do you have some kind of beef or was i just not livin right// another day of life for me is just another fuckin demise// and these upper middle class have the nerve to ask why we commit crimes// lets see how theyd fend in the situation where its a fight to survive// I dont see shit gettin better so why not just end it all and take my own life in the middle of a busy mall// so these financially secure people can watch my broken body fall// I wonder if they'd try to prevent it// and yell NO DONT SHOOT// or just ignore this piece of shit// and go on with their daily commute// i dont see any reason not to// so i guess my plans are going through// dear lord this ones for you// 1.....2....3.....BOOM!!!!!!// (body drops to the floor in a bloody mess and the only people who even acknoledge it is the mall janitors) |
uppin for wat yall think about tis piece
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hell yeah we uppin da shit outa dis
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still uppin
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Shit Was Pretty Dope..Off At times But Aight..All Came Nice..Its Flowed Okay Throughout All Of The Verse's..You All Should've Packed For Multi's In It..but Its Still Tight..Overall A Nice Drop..Pz..
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this was hot..in my opinion..but there's always room forr improvement..i jus' can't point speciifics out..so keep doin what yall doin..
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sum mad imagery here in all the verses. lol ur verse was just too long and difficult to read but u still kept up wit the imagery. yas coulda done wit uppin ya vocab. just one thing tho u only examined the situation in a one dimensional way. i mean i've lived on estates (british equivalent of the projects) all my life wit no money but i've never given in and then gone on to commit crime. i understand why yas might have written bout it but u just gotta fuck all the people not given ya jobs and just keep at it till ya get one. lol i kno thats all a bit long fuckin winded but it was just sumthin i was thinkin when readin this piece. anyway check mine ninja philosophy. aight cuz peace
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All three came acroos tight, Heavy piece,
Damani-DaGrinch:- the worst times gotta be them cold ass nights// poverty has no prefrences foy black or white// where is this god that was suppost to be right by my side// do you have some kind of beef or was i just not livin right// It not only sounds tight, I like what you said, However all came strong, tight piece, Keep it up, |
still uppin
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i feel you cuz this shit was kind of long but there was just a lot that we had to say bout this piece
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man i could see all of that happenin, ya'll came good.very nice
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Ay yall...this was a tight collab, no doubt..long piece, no doubt..but a tight piece..all of yall came strong with the content n on point with the flow..had a lot to say n yall knew what yall were talkin about..knew just how to say it too...very nyce droppin..stay up with this..ill keep an eye out for more writes from all 3 of yall..much propz.
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uppin on tis
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damn SHIT!! tight shit y'all 2 many narcoleptics keep droppin'em shits 2 b honest have no favorite part whole shit came correct..............much respektz
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glad yall feelin dis piece....
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