needs tweaking badly
 

Feel like i'm on trial because of my style
i ain't in denial i'm a product of 8 mile
and i say dat with a big fuckin smile
i need some tail it's been quite a while
my rhymes are so-so but i have no flow
and no hoe only numbers to dial on the big ole phone
i'm like the vaccine to the motherfuckin rapscene
abstinence is not for me thats too much like fasting
i'm 2 obscene 4 you pussies to get past me
i see your lips flapping what you trying to ask me
i was only on my way cuz i know youd like to blast me
I now realize you were penalized for having that nasty cow for a mother
one way or another i'll be found not dead
when is the last time you got head you fuckin pot head
i'm so hot headed and i'm headed through a red light in your district
i may be irrate for a flyweight least i got sheets & food to eat on my plate
i'm a little impatient still i wait for my big day pimpin livin just a skylight away
how dare you violate my blinddate the stakes have changed but it's now stalemate too late for your page to be turned just let it burn
i'm gonna riot and ecsape back to the barn i'll meet you there
if you have the guts to show up i know i'll beat you there so throw up your arms
arent you aware of the situation at hand
i'm having a fucking revelation again
so pay more attention to my fly affectionate phrases
taking you bitches through mazes
chew how do you do it you amaze us
please appraise us for a loan you say
please realize that i can't condone this gay
he's condemned to play with his nuts all day
i just turn and walk away & kill you the minute you hit on me
An ounce of pain what is this charades
you rain on my parade & i'll break both you legs
sorry i just aint got no respect for fags
once im paid you cant raid my snoop deville
I aint scared bitch & i always shoot to kill
tell your mom she's beautiful I know you will
i hit her up last night do you know who paid the bill
just because this rhyme sux dont mean i have no skill
I am only a drunk likes to freestyle and pop pills
like ecstacy morphine prozac and advils
and when i try my hardest i prove i have mad skills
make your brains look like you have tiny cat skulls
i appreciate the pranks you pull you little rascals
time to go though there's a task at hand for the master
give me a decent rating you bastards or ima make your cap spill
i'm just kidding still i aint so nice
i'd knock your lights out but you aint got no lights
my rap is weak but you should check my bull fights
i'm undefeated better believe that's right
clear the deck night after night


this is so shitty but thats ok;; :gfy: fuck all you bitch ass haters don't want your opinions!!! got it!!

If you are an actual rapper that has a pretty good disc made already than I would like your response and any suggestions or methods that proved to work for you. Or just to promote a track if you think i'd be interested in hearing it,thank you

I think you could do a little better on this one but here is what I found you need to use more imagry homes you had alright vocab alright closure but the opener had my lost but no hate.

6.6/10