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.MictoriouS. vs xOverdozEx
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6 - UNLIMITED Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Minimum posts to vote: 40 Check in by: 01-16-05 at 04:03 PM Must drop verse in 180 minutes after check in. |
xOverdozEx has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-15-05 04:03 PM.
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You On The High Way To Hell Buh Yoh There Aint No Rest-Stops
Dawg Ya Can't Turn Back Now Just Because This Thread's Red-Hot Ya Cant Spit I Aint Ever Seen You Throw A Real Direct-Shot You Never Wanna 'Start' Unless It's On Your Computer Desktop!!!! But Lets-Not Go Ahead And Take This Battle To Drastice-Measures You 'Playin A Part' You Cant Handle So You Needa Get Ya Act-Together! You A Whack-Contendor... You Dont Belong Like The Ugly-Duckling If You Had The Hands Of God, You Still Wouldnt Be Touching-Nothing Im Just-Disgusting So You Gotta Try Ya Absolute Best-To-Win So You'll Probaly 'Pussy' Out Coz I Know You Got That Estrogen You Wont Beat Me Homie Unless You Can Pull An Amazing-Stunt Coz To Me.... You Just Another One Of My Faceless-Chumps You Shouldnt Have Accepted This If You Cant Take-A-Punch But The Only Time You 'Serve' Kids Is When You Make-They-Lunch!!!! Get At Me.... |
.MictoriouS. has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-15-05 06:22 PM.
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..Ya verse is Garnished-Junk..
'Take That Trash Back Where You Found It'..like 'Reversing The Service Of A Garbage-Dump' !! ..These fist gonna Grind-Sum-More Cuz my punches comin "Back To Back" Like I "Tied A Knot In His Spinal-Cord".. ..Ima Rest-This-Phony; and leave Ovadose "Witness To His Own Death" Like "Resurected Murder Victims In Testamony"..!! ..He's Already Dosed Heavy-Leaded' How Do I Know? Cause He Name-Name-Already-Says-It Spit Some More? Nah. Your name already says how The-Battle-Ended !! I see 'small fries' in 'Super-Sizes', but nobody knows who this chick or Guy-Is, So i'll 'Jam-Over Ya Awarness With A Sexual Indentity' and leave His 'Gender Full Of Surprises' !! G/Luck |
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Voted For: .MictoriouS.
overdoze.......... You On The High Way To Hell Buh Yoh There Aint No Rest-Stops Dawg Ya Can't Turn Back Now Just Because This Thread's Red-Hot nope Ya Cant Spit I Aint Ever Seen You Throw A Real Direct-Shot You Never Wanna 'Start' Unless It's On Your Computer Desktop!!!! nice try But Lets-Not Go Ahead And Take This Battle To Drastice-Measures You 'Playin A Part' You Cant Handle So You Needa Get Ya Act-Together! ehhh...couldve been written much betta You A Whack-Contendor... You Dont Belong Like The Ugly-Duckling If You Had The Hands Of God, You Still Wouldnt Be Touching-Nothing damn that was played Im Just-Disgusting So You Gotta Try Ya Absolute Best-To-Win So You'll Probaly 'Pussy' Out Coz I Know You Got That Estrogen nope........ Coz To Me.... You Just Another One Of My Faceless-Chumps You Shouldnt Have Accepted This If You Cant Take-A-Punch But The Only Time You 'Serve' Kids Is When You Make-They-Lunch!!!! best bar......................still sucked 2/10.......elevate alot...... Mictorious ..Ya verse is Garnished-Junk.. 'Take That Trash Back Where You Found It'..like 'Reversing The Service Of A Garbage-Dump' !! lol....that was good...nice opener...fix tha structure ..Ima Rest-This-Phony; and leave Ovadose "Witness To His Own Death" Like "Resurected Murder Victims In Testamony"..!! nice.......had no flow......and fix tha structure ..He's Already Dosed Heavy-Leaded' How Do I Know? Cause He Name-Name-Already-Says-It Spit Some More? Nah. Your name already says how The-Battle-Ended !! ehhhh...na...repition is bad...not a good flow...bad struct. I see 'small fries' in 'Super-Sizes', but nobody knows who this chick or Guy-Is, So i'll 'Jam-Over Ya Awarness With A Sexual Indentity' and leave His 'Gender Full Of Surprises' !! holy fucking shit...ladies n gentlemen...thats a wrap \V/-mictorious for too many good punches...lol...get at me on aim for help wit ya structure man...i think u need it |
Voted For: .MictoriouS.
Openor=Mic Good Punch Structure=Tie Both Good Stukture Punches=Mic,Good Vokab In Ya Punches Vokab=Mic ^^ Explained it Personals=None Closer=Mic Good Closer And Punch Cus.............. Overall Mic Took Thiss With Stringer Punches Vokab And Hiss Shit Wass Hott......... |
Voted For: .MictoriouS.
over..... basically the only thing good about your verse was your multis and your structure.....you had 2 decent bars in the middle but the rest were wack and didnt hit very well.....no hate...you have potential....just elevate..... Mic........ work on your structure man....its fucked up and hard to read...i could see someone voting against you just for that........but your had pretty good vocab....your punches hit harder.....you had better concepts through your whole verse...... i thought you both came pretty weak....not a very fun battle to read...but mic got this with better and more complex punches............. |
Well, Uppin this ............................................
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Voted For: xOverdozEx
Booooooo@this shit. Mic, man you have terrible structure, I don't even think your shit rhymed. And even if it did it was supremely stretched. OD, your shit was ehhhhhh to the max. You focus too much on multis and it takes away from punches, drastically. Boith gotta elevate and read more battles. Another thing I would say is to use much much much more personals cuz they seriously lacked. But., v-OD |
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Voted For: xOverdozEx
this battle was close at 1st but then pulled in the opposite direction 4 overdose: opener: both vocab: ill structure: overdose multis:both closer: overdose the reason y overdose won my vote was b'cuz he was direct & str8 2 the point wit his punches; while ill's lines were stretched & left me having 2 find his rhyme make sure 2 return the favor |
Voted For: .MictoriouS.
lockdown killed u dawg....better punches and shit...ok vocab for both..flow was aiight....no hate...return the favour in my om....peace... |
Voted For: .MictoriouS.
ok, heres how i see it, not gunna break it down or anything, but.... overdose....thought you did okay,, your punches were weak and alot of them have been used already......so i just suggest being a little more creative, and, upping wordplay and vocab so you can get more effectiveness outta your punches......but, your flow and structure were alright, so you can build off that.....you just need a little more complexity and creativity at your punch attempts. mictorious.......i thought you had the harder punches/personals........but the one thing i had a problem with was your structure, very had to follow at times and should be worked on for future battles....but, as far as the battle goes, you took this one, your punches were more thought out, had good wordplay which helped also, just flow and structure were my only problems, but still had enough to get my vote v/mictorious |
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