Rap's In Trouble
 

Rap's in trouble mage about to double back
and lock the rap again ain't no attacking him
got a flo like the rhein
try to flo like mine
got the flo how and know how to decimate dimes
try to estimate rhymes of mine it's no question
you ain't learned ya lesson you wrong so stop guessin
i'm greater at my worst then most is at they best and
naw it's okay yall i gotta flo great
yall call me the stereotype
cause i'm the type you like to bite and play up in the stereo right?
and we the difference tween' night and day
write and say i say what i write right? right
that's life cause i'm livin in the fast lane the highway IS my way
i try to flip this but it always land sideways
lyrics lift my spirits i get higher than a fly weight
a killa with the scrilla like the 13th of friday
my life i live and take to heart
i put this game together and i can take apart
naw i ain't cocky i came back like rocky
i got the right to brag until somebody stop me
you not me don't pretend to be
you better park yourself at start cause the end is me
you play stupid, still ain't smart as you appear to be
if you can't be perfect who as near as me
okay yeah i'll admit maybe i'm a little arrogant
got sick of rippin tracks and decided to start tearin it
got the glow i'm on a roll in a class wit my own notes
yall blow you know it's low when you laugh at ya own jokes
i'm the blackmage instead of notepad, spellbook
all my rhymes is like heaven when i spit em hell look
from song to song looks like back to back bomb to bomb
hooks on a track they stacked on and on
the punchline comin fast don't blink
i'm back to make all these rappers know rap's extinct
but somehow i'm still livin and livid as hell
my rhymes absolutely vivid and givin the spell
that i'm casting that tit for tat is ever lasting
i'm back forevermore and one last thing
yo rap's in trouble...

that was iight ..wasnt really feelin it structurem fucked it up
but it was iight..
6/10

e.z

thanks
 

thanks man i wasn't really focused on this cause it was a keystyle and i was doing something else at the time so whatever came out just kinda came out

need feed back homie hit me up and speak on the verse

take that huge ass gay sig outta there it streches shit way TO MUCH..

but anyway....your stucutre was very bad but you flowed good with weak vocabulary and there was nothing creative about it sry to say but i jsut aint feelign the verse...

return the feed...links in the sig

-Parallel

don't stretch ur lines when u rhyme & keep it basic & 2 da point & elevate in ur flow
make sure 2 return the favor