LADY~FIYA vs WICKED CLOWN
 

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TOPIC-HEAVENLY PATH

c h e c k...

c h e c k...

checkity checkers......... good luck, wicked clown.. :thumbup:

----Familiar flesh, colors more sanguine…
----Best friends, worst enemies, constant drama…
----Forbidden sins and mistakes…
----No common doubt, for, you see the end..
----Tip-toeing on cracked, open egg shells…
----Either ashes to dust…
----Sins ending in purgatory…
----Voices never fading…
----broken stairs by choice..

Note: It is written in this format to present the heavenly path vs. the world’s tunnel.. The path is a stairway, it starts off as both being similar in size, because people of the world sometimes don’t know the difference between the two.. The farther you go the longer the stair.. You should get the rest.. and good luck, Wicked Clown.. :thumbup:
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lady got this one, sorry wicked i read your and loved it efore she dropped but man hers hit me, and her format of writing it was so nice,
lady gets this, wicked i knew you bith ould come good but she came 1% harder man

get at mine

Ok Wasnt Much Creativity From Either Of You That Made Me Mad Fiya You Had Good Vocab Imagery Wasnt Good Emotion Was Decent I Wasnt Really Feeling Your Poem Here Like I Usually Do I Understood The Poem And Where You Were Trying To Go I Even Liked The Writing Of It But I Feel You Aint Write The Issue Properly Here It Seems Rushed.
Wicked Like I Said Neither Of Yall Had Creativity Much You Had Decent Vocab Could Be Better Metaphores Is What You Lack And Need To Work On Good Emotion And Imagery Here The Imagery Is What Set It Apart From Fiyas Poem Here I Liked How You Wrote It And Approached The Topic From A Nice Prospective I Was Really Feeling Your Poem More Here Even Though It Shouldve Been Longer And Stop Writing In That Color Its Fucking Annoying.
Vote-wicked Clown

thanks for the vote... 1-1... good luck LF
DONT FREEPOST AGAIN HOCAKE READ THE RULES THEY ALL TAKE EFFECT NEXT WEEK :thumbup:

Fiya had imagery and structure but Wicked had emotion, which I value above all other categories. His emotion made a swirl of colors be envisiioned in your head while Fiya yours seemed predictable and less enjoyable. But still good job both of you.

\\//ote = Wicked Clown

im gonna hav 2 vote 4 wickedclown by a lil bit........wanted 2 vote for lady fiya but it jus didnt feel right

The thing that seperated the two poems was the emotion...more emotion came through in Wicked Clown's drop and it got me more involved in the poem...Lady Fiya's drop was not the usual sickness that we seen time and time again and i werent feelin the structure even tho u explained it.....it was a decent drop but lacked creativity and emotion...i say dis knowin Fiya gon drop sumin deep nxt week 2 shut me up..

no h8 ..Peace..RTF plz :thumbup:

My vote=Wickedclwon

Aii yAll Ima Have to come off a Thin Limb and Vote for Wicked But It was barely Won if ya ask Me because LAdy came Hard I really wanted to vote for her but It somethin Was Lacked I jus cant put my finger on it but i can tell it was absent LOL.....BUt I think you did Great but Wicked came out and did his thang And He did it better So my
Vote/Wicked

wicked clown wins closed