cinnamon20ohio vs Black Queen
 

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Check in by: 01-24-05 at 12:47 PM

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black queen ive seen some ur battles better take some notes cause ya rhymes remind me of a joke yeah u fuck with me ill crush u like i do oxies after i beat ull end up trying to fight me but u better go get ur click b4 u try to fuck with me ill leave u with nine shots n u be screamin help me help me trick aint nobody wanna help u left for dead cryin hopin ur crew will come save u but they dont cause they know if they fuckin try to theyd be left for dead just like u now u layin in tha dirt just like biggie did got puffy damn diggity cryin ova his nigga layin in tha dirt cause his rhymes was weak just like urs got ya homies cryin cause they aint got nobody to hide behind no more ya herd

cinnamon20ohio has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-21-05 01:04 PM.

what the hell is this u niggas see me comin yall try to forfit cause my rhymes is like a raging bull comin at ya gonna split right threw u oh well who new i was the new bitch on the block go fuckin with me yull get ya ass shot we all know my verses hot thas why when u read it ur eyes start burnnin n ya fingers start curlin my shit makes u feel like ur lyrics is garbage thas why u regret callin me out an goin against me u hopin wishin u could be just like me but u cant im one of a kind thas y u takin notes as soon as u read my lines not even u with ur click can beat me trick bitch

:shoot: what the hell is this u niggas see me comin yall try to forfit cause my rhymes is like a raging bull comin at ya gonna split right threw u oh well who new i was the new bitch on the block go fuckin with me yull get ya ass shot we all know my verses hot thas why when u read it ur eyes start burnnin n ya fingers start curlin my shit makes u feel like ur lyrics is garbage thas why u regret callin me out an goin against me u hopin wishin u could be just like me but u cant im one of a kind thas y u takin notes as soon as u read my lines not even u with ur click can beat me trick bitch :spit:

Black Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-21-05 03:07 PM.

i didnt even kno u set up a battle i dont even kno u but ill merk u real quick

on the mic, on the crowd, on the net, and the game
if u'd like, you're allowed, to go get, a new name
and start from the beginning, a breath of fresh air
from the depths of the streets that i've claimed as my lair
with all those personals ya'll homey's still see that BOs gifted
its funny you know so much about me i didnt even know you existed
im taking the underground one sewer at a time
but first i'll skewer u in the head with my sick rhymes
since im just so original, you shld be callin me werther (werther's original)
and worried whether or not yo heart will stop beatin
once i've ripped it from ya chest, now there aint no retreatin
breathin was once a luxury until i took it away
since the air fuels my words and like bullets, my words spray
lets see you spit now with this sick disfiguration
fuck it, lets see you try to even hold a conversation

black queen ive seen some ur battles better take some notes cause ya rhymes remind me of a joke yeah u fuck with me ill crush u like i do oxies after i beat ull end up trying to fight me but u better go get ur click b4 u try to fuck with me ill leave u with nine shots n u be screamin help me help me trick aint nobody wanna help u left for dead cryin hopin ur crew will come save u but they dont cause they know if they fuckin try to theyd be left for dead just like u now u layin in tha dirt just like biggie did got puffy damn diggity cryin ova his nigga layin in tha dirt cause his rhymes was weak just like urs got ya homies cryin cause they aint got nobody to hide behind no more ya herd

black queen ive seen some ur battles better take some notes cause ya rhymes remind me of a joke yeah u fuck with me ill crush u like i do oxies after i beat ull end up trying to fight me but u better go get ur click b4 u try to fuck with me ill leave u with nine shots n u be screamin help me help me trick aint nobody wanna help u left for dead cryin hopin ur crew will come save u but they dont cause they know if they fuckin try to theyd be left for dead just like u now u layin in tha dirt just like biggie did got puffy damn diggity cryin ova his nigga layin in tha dirt cause his rhymes was weak just like urs got ya homies cryin cause they aint got nobody to hide behind no more ya herd

Voted For: Black Queen

I gotta give this one to black queen. In someone else's battle i posted sayin that structure doesnt really effect the quality of a verse and that i could read anything. I was wrong. I couldn't even read the other verse. I was trying to find rhymes and it took me like 15 minutes. Plus the punches were weak. I don't even know if ohio had multis or personals but i doubt it. Black queen had structure and decent punches but no multis and no personals. Still this goes to Black Queen. Return the favor

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Voted For: Black Queen

One-sided...this goes to Black Queen, hands down...

Cinnamon20ohio: fix your structure first of all so it's easier to read. Wasn't feeling your flow,vocab was good though.Didn't have any hardhitting punches or personals whatsoever, used self-glorification which is a big no-no in fact.No hate though but this was weak, read other battles to see how to improve your structure first of all...

Black Queen: not the best verse I've seen from you but that's good cause it had just been a waste of time anyway...Had some good punches in there,nothing extremly hardhitting though.Vocab,flow n structure were straight on as usual. Some nice wordplay in there to. Overall solid drop, definately deserve the win.

Please return the favor...

Voted For: Black Queen

wow slow down black queen ;)
but here is how it went black queen gets this becuase she came harder and her rhyming was good, personels where good opener-closure was good, vocab was iight multis where ok, imagry was good and she took the strucutre really well. Some of ur stuff was stretched and I just could not follow it and her flow was good also so over all blackqueen gets this and here is what she did to get the vote.

on the mic, on the crowd, on the net, and the game
if u'd like, you're allowed, to go get, a new name
and start from the beginning, a breath of fresh air
from the depths of the streets that i've claimed as my lair
with all those personals ya'll homey's still see that BOs gifted
its funny you know so much about me i didnt even know you existed
im taking the underground one sewer at a time
but first i'll skewer u in the head with my sick rhymes
7.8/10

rt the fav on my links please peace.

This was feedback posted for cinnamon20ohio
 

OOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHH MMMMMYYYYYYYYYY GGGGOOOOOOODDDDD!!!
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cricket...cricket!!
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u need a lot of elevation!!

no hate of course...im just saying take the people's advice...I didn't even read past ur first line yo...fix ur structure!! and I would give this to black queen still...she pretty much took it with punches and everything!!

Voted For: Black Queen

just checkin da polls yall.........................