Relentless Vs. Lil D'
 

10-20 bars//
no d/r, haten, crew votes,
feedin, bitin,
check in my nigga

checkin in for ya. ima proably post around 10 or so for ya.
holla
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a since we both got 8 points, do u wanna put em on the line?
holla
~1~

Bitch you so fuckin bad I make you change ya name to fiasco... couldn't be hott if you was tabasco... got swings but no flow... you're useless like a pimp wit streets but no hoes... you don't spit bout havin no lable, cuz niggas know you ain't real, know you ain't able... and if you eva did talk it then that was a fable... relentless you ain't shit... only time you are what you say you be, is when you on the dick (relentless)... like yo avatar man... shows the whole world, ya whole crew is blonde bitches wit firm hands... ban me from H20, I don't give a fuck i don't wanna be part of yo frat party... the whole crew is lyrically retarded... I'll rape and kill you bitches then conceal the body... and if they won't beef bring it cuz that shit just got started... but blame is not on yo crew... assumption says they learnt bein whack, fake, and lame from their leader, you...

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I’m coming wit a cannibal hand that can damage this man, wit the same stamina as a flammable can/
(D)icks (I)s your (C)areer (K)ey, you lost your masculinity, as soon as you bent over, and said give it to me/
spits from my inner cores will singe your pores, like I charred your guts with more gore, then a flaming Samurai sword/
unsuccessfully battle me, and I’ll put you on a medieval torture bed unknown to this galaxy, strap you in laterally, pull till your arms and legs pop out your human anatomy, and all that’s left is your spine and chest cavity/
I dont care if you hard, and born steal, your not gon heal, after I drop you out a airplane naked into a thorn field/
Don’t you know who you facing? I spit so much gama radiation, that I’ll leave your hair falling out like cancer patients/
disected this specimen, and the only hormone I found was estrogen, which explains why you always seem to be dickrydin and sexin men/
battle me I diminish your fear, beat you into another hemisphere, get a win over me? (Ha!) that’s like a deaf person lending a ear/
surrender your peers before punches be rendering tears, hang this gay from a rooftop so I’m suspending this queer/
L.D. (LilDallas) descibes you perfectly, I murder you verbally, gettin a win? nope! your lost column is rising vertically/

i was gonna post more, but I'm done.
holla
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uppin for some votes. 8 points is on the line i guess if somebody can explain to us how you put em on the line.
holla
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yo them was some double bars playa', but it's aight, usually peeps just put the slash after the end of each line insteada ery 2, but that ain't effectin nothing, no harm done.

breakdown::
 

lil dallas::


Bitch you so fuckin bad I make you change ya name to fiasco... couldn't be hott if you was tabasco... got swings but no flow... you're useless like a pimp wit streets but no hoes...

THIS PRETTY MUCH BASIC SHIT,NOTHING HARD HITTING HERE,NO GOOD SETUP OR PUNCH COMBO..YOU NEED TO LEARN HOW TO SETIT UP NICE AND FUCK ALL THAT FILLER SHIT,AND END IT WIH A NICE PUNCH.


you don't spit bout havin no lable, cuz niggas know you ain't real, know you ain't able... and if you eva did talk it then that was a fable... relentless you ain't shit... only time you are what you say you be, is when you on the dick

AGAIN NOTHING HARD HITTING,LOTS OF FILLER,YOU DIDNT SETUP WELL HERE OR COME HARD WITH A NICE PUNCH,NEED SOME MULTIS ALSO,WHERES THE WORDPLAY MAN,IF THERE IS SOME IN THERE THEN YOU DIDNT WORD IT GOOD ENOUGH


like yo avatar man... shows the whole world, ya whole crew is blonde bitches wit firm hands... ban me from H20, I don't give a fuck i don't wanna be part of yo frat party... the whole crew is lyrically retarded... I'll rape and kill you bitches then conceal the body... and if they won't beef bring it cuz that shit just got started... but blame is not on yo crew... assumption says they learnt bein whack, fake, and lame from their leader, you...

THIS AGAIN NOTHING HARD HITTING HERE,YOU NEED TO WORK ON YOUR SHIT MAN,START WRITING MORE EVERYDAY I MEAN,IT WILL COME,BUT THIS HERE WAS NOTA GOOD VERSE..WHAT I SAY ABOUT THESE VERSES ARE SHIT MAN,
TRY TO COME WITH A GOOD SETUP AND END WITH A HARD PUNCH COMBO FOR THE OPENER,AND THROUGH OUT THE VERSE ENTERTAIN THE READER COME WITH SOME DOPE WORDPLAY AND NICE PUNCHES,AT THE END OF YOUR VERSE YOU HAVE TO COME REALLY HARD MAKE THE READER SAY WHOA,IT WILL COME JUST PRACTICE..



RELENTLESS::

I’m coming wit a cannibal hand that can damage this man, wit the same stamina as a flammable can/
(D)icks (I)s your (C)areer (K)ey, you lost your masculinity, as soon as you bent over, and said give it to me/

NOT BAD OF AN OPENER,NEEDED A BETTER SETUP AND PUNCH COMBO,YOURS WASNT TO MY LIKEING BUT IT WAS COOL.


spits from my inner cores will singe your pores, like I charred your guts with more gore, then a flaming Samurai sword/
unsuccessfully battle me, and I’ll put you on a medieval torture bed unknown to this galaxy, strap you in laterally, pull till your arms and legs pop out your human anatomy, and all that’s left is your spine and chest cavity/

OK SHIT HERE,FIRST SETUP WAS GOOD,I FELT WHERE YOU WERE GOING,BUT YOU ENDED WITH A PRETTY SHITTY PUNCH AND THAT SHIT WAS LONG,IT WAS ALL STRETCHED AND SHIT,NEED TO BREAK IT UP,IF YOU REWORDED IT GOOD IT WOULD OF BEEN NICE


I dont care if you hard, and born steal, your not gon heal, after I drop you out a airplane naked into a thorn field/
Don’t you know who you facing? I spit so much gama radiation, that I’ll leave your hair falling out like cancer patients/

OK,YOU REALLY DONT NEED ALL THAT UNESSARY MULTIS IN THERE,BUT ITS YOUR STYLE,CAUSE USAULLY IT REVERSES THE EFFECT OF THE PUNCH,BUT COO



disected this specimen, and the only hormone I found was estrogen, which explains why you always seem to be dickrydin and sexin men/
battle me I diminish your fear, beat you into another hemisphere, get a win over me? (Ha!) that’s like a deaf person lending a ear/

NOT FEELING THIS,PRETTY MUCH FILLER TO ME,NO HARD SHIT HERE



surrender your peers before punches be rendering tears, hang this gay from a rooftop so I’m suspending this queer/
L.D. (LilDallas) descibes you perfectly, I murder you verbally, gettin a win? nope! your lost column is rising vertically/

OK ENDING,NOT TOO HARD THOUGH.DECENT VERSE


UMM VOTE IS FOR RELENTLESS WHY?? CAUSE HE CAME WITH PUNCHES I COULD UNDERSTAND,I FELT HE CAME WITH SOME NICE MULTIS BUT HAD WAY TO MANY FOR MY LIKING,DALLAS YOU NEED TO WORK ON SOME SHIT,IT WILL COME DONT GET FRUSTRATED,RELENTLESS WORK ON YOUR SETUP COMBOS IT WILL ALSO COME,TRY CUTTING DOWN ON EXCESSIVE MULTIS TOO

VOTE RELENTLESS

thanx for the vote 1-0. liked how you broke it down cuz thats not my usual style. I just wanted to try something different for this.
holla
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aight for the votes it 5 to win 3-0 is a k.o.
uppin for more votes.
holla
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yeh thanx for the vote rep, even though you prolly sealed my fate, lol, still cool that you voted on one of my batts.

uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Vote relentless, since repitwa analyzed about every aspect of tha shit ima jus be brief.
Relentless jus came with better structure and a few harder punches,lil d's shit jus seemed too scrambled for me ta understand.
Peace.

thanx for the vote! 2-0 uppin for more.
holla
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damn I knew Repitwa's vote was gonna sway opinouns.