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Skriptz vs J.R. Freeze
Battle Rules:
6 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 3-0 = KO Minimum posts to vote: 100 Check in by: 01-22-05 at 09:02 PM Must drop verse in 20 minutes after check in. DQ'ed.. went over line limit |
J.R. Freeze has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-22-05 08:37 PM.
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Skriptz has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-22-05 08:38 PM.
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J.R's nothing, I could help u and give your dark world some light
Fact is, the main success in your life, would be grabbing' a MIC You sick? This kid hasn't got a firm 'texture' he'll fall apart And the only reason people will be voting on this, cause of my part When you challenged a newbie & I accepted, blatant lies Cause kid, you could not ever hit me like punching at flies |
J.R's nothing, I could help u and give your dark world some light
Fact is, the main success in your life, would be grabbing' a MIC You sick? This kid hasn't got a firm 'texture' he'll fall apart And the only reason people will be voting on this, cause of my part When you challenged a newbie & I accepted, blatant lies Cause kid, you could not ever hit me like punching at flies If you don't get the punches...etc..please don't vote.. |
start it......
aight, lyrical destruction of mc’s like weapons~of~mass, silently destroyin opposition swiftly like a ninja, so when im creepin I stay wearin~a~mask// Rhymes flowin swift and fast, invisible like glass, so there aint no chance of u seein my shit, it’s like u visually impaired~in~the~dark// Skriptz scared of walkin, alone~in~the~park, verbal attack, got your mental disconnected as I bite off your dome~like~a~shark// My lines come rollin full circle like a double~arc, re~mark, that im merkin u quickly, exploding like a room full of gas~then~a~spark// Rhymes put together an displayed as if they be a fine~art, u got torn~apart from lyrical torture, just as if I put u on~the~rack// Destroy your rhymes, knock u and launch~attack, put u on~your~back, slow reactions like u just smoked~a~sack, your limbs got torn an your bones~got~cracked// …:::finisher::: Ill Rearrange Your *Eyes* With Your *Ears* So You Can *See* How Rediculous You *Sound*/ Ill bet My *Loose Change* That Beatin Me Is *Impossible* Like Tryin To *Run Away From The Ground*/ |
yo my bad u said 8 lines in the battle area i wrote it 8.......
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back it up and remove 2 lines, cuz when i read it just 2mins ago
i thought i put 8, but i said fuck it and went 6 |
This was feedback posted for Skriptz
It was 6 lines, This should be a dq battle, skriptz win.
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[QUOTE=J.R. Freeze]start it......
aight, lyrical destruction of mc’s like weapons~of~mass, silently destroyin opposition swiftly like a ninja, so when im creepin I stay wearin~a~mask// Rhymes flowin swift and fast, invisible like glass, so there aint no chance of u seein my shit, it’s like u visually impaired~in~the~dark// Skriptz scared of walkin, alone~in~the~park, verbal attack, got your mental disconnected as I bite off your dome~like~a~shark// My lines come rollin full circle like a double~arc, re~mark, that im merkin u quickly, exploding like a room full of gas~then~a~spark// Rhymes put together an displayed as if they be a fine~art, u got torn~apart from lyrical torture, just as if I put u on~the~rack// Destroy your rhymes, knock u and launch~attack, put u on~your~back, slow reactions like u just smoked~a~sack, your limbs got torn an your bones~got~cracked// |
Voted For: Skriptz
J.R freeze man your stucture made my eyes bleed dont put all them ~~~ in it that dosent show anything....a perfect example for good stucture is skriptz do it like that i know your gonna say you do multis and thats your style but it dont make a differentce you can use multis the way skriptz writes his verse it just depends on your stucture you have set and how many lines you use to make it flow...but next is your punches they were weak and i didnt see any creative metas there...not feeeling your verse alot...but if you understand what i ment with my feed you could elevate...no hate pz Skriptz: not your best but i can see why.....you had creativty and good emtas in there very good stucture and flow so it all worked for you..nothing different tho from you skriptz....but jsut keep doing yo thang...you got this... opener: S closer: S vocab: J.R metas: S stucture: s flow: s punches: s win/ Skriptz |
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