Real Shit..Not Ja Rule Crap....
 

chased and beat into a coner has men on the end of there Wits
Condenced, by evidence, through events that there Future is allready Writ

hard to deal with some of the things that cant be avoided
parents fucking up your Smarts being Exploited, having your oppertunitys Voided

as the tranquillity of childhood falls Relization is RAISED
the faults both your own and of others are Waved,

Pave ya own way now its time ta do the breaking through
once your future was delt to you, now what is your vision of whats True

its all a phillisophical self descovry to what one will Accept
fate is in the beholders own mind LIVE WITHOUT REGRET

new oppertunitys occur in every miniute of every passing Turn of the EARTH
One may feel as tho they are Cursed, there is nothing worse then denying yourself of your BIRTH

break in and absorb new Air, dont sit around n explain how life AINT FARE
beware of the Toxins constinly inhaled, everyone has failed, perfection of self is whats Rare

defeating your past will take you into the next PHASES
this is all just advice brought to you by my own lifes PAGES
Break Through, cuz what has been written also Erases
Break through, every day, life isn't all about WAGES

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STRUCTURE is da most important thang need to improve on dat but overall da verse was good vocab was dere flow was on point most often good open mic

thanks for the honest feed...yea i added a lil bit more then i shoulda....uppin....

Work on ya structure..chop it down short and simple
complexity...got wha u was tryin 2 say..jus complex it
throw some more metas and similies in there
seemed kinda basic
wordplay and vocab was ok
your delivery was better than your set up
set ups were kinda lame..cant jus throw anything before a punch

work on them things and u should make it here

*Nuff Said*