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The feeling I get.. (Message to hip hop)
Feeling I get When people neglect to understand.. Before judgeing others purpose, and raising a hand.. A fist to demand a change, who do we blame? When the world is filled with the masses.. Acting mindlessly the same.. Who do we blame? When I'm stressing the message, & nobody listens.. No matter how loud I scream, can I get a witness? People act like its not a problem, but life is a game.. If I could change one thing.. Hip hop would not be the same.. But life is a game.. And thats the feeling I get.. Play hard, live long.. Dont do it all for respect.. Trust yourself, as individuals.. Dont follow the norm.. See the message is spiritual.. Untill the human race is dead and gone.. |
weeerrdd....ppl wud think ur some overly deep brutha, preacha style until they checked ur avvy lol............shit was deep man..like tha way u gave every stanza a like heading or pretext was dope..no overly creatice imagery or complex vocab it was just deep,dope...:thumbup:
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I just had some shit I felt like getting off my chest. So I wrote two poems..
I'll check yours out soon. |
Dope drop. It makes people stand still and think about it for a while. Didn't kill it with big vocab, kept it simple without losing the strength of the message. No messing around, there you have it..bam, strong!
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haha, damn man, nyce as usuall, i could really see wut you tryin to say.. 8/10
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Felt what you were saying. Kinda short but I like short. When not in the mood to read. But I liked it. Help me out with my poems. Please. Check mines out. It's my first. Leave some helpful feed mayn....
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yea dawg, this was real nice. I liked the way you put this together, good words, story- keep doin it.
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Wow, FIrst Piece I Read Like This And I Liked It Man, You Had A Good Set Of Vocabulary Nice Structure, Keep This Up, Be More Descriptive Though That's All I Got To Say Home Boy Other Then That This Was Deep....8.5/10 |
this was fuckin deep! for so short'n all
such a truthful piece too, props |
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