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Da $hizzle
HOOK:
i'm big, crunk and fly i'm da type of guy that u come to if ur rhymes are dry i snap hits like twigs but if u hatin' then fuck u pigs(2x) VERSE: fuck wit' me punk and end up dead in da trunk push da pedal and swirve as if i was drunk you'll shake, tremble, and shivva while i dump ur ass in da rivva cut out ur kidneys, bladda, and livva (fo' real??!!) hell yeah don't believe me then come and see me i'll show ya it ain't easy i grow where da failure's be but i'm so greedy that i have ur girl please me she be kissin' me while she squeeze me but i don't care it may be unfair but i prefers ta be in my undawear so we share what's unda the pubic hair ain't that a scare but i'm in dat puss so much that i just tear there ain't no mo' shit ta declare but now da show's on so let's listen while da hook rolls on HOOK: i'm big, crunk and fly i'm da type of guy that u come to if ur rhymes are dry i snap hits like twigs but if u hatin' then fuck u pigs(2x) ************************************************** ******************************** open mic rules: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=141490 leave ya link: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165166 u have 24 hours to post a link with proper feed back if u dont understand what is a proper feed back click on these links above they should help those who really dont understand and for those who is playin dumb u'r one step to being BANND from open mic... |
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wow thats possibly the worst open mic ive ever seen
Log off the site right fuckin now *Nuff Said* |
fuck ya'll you don't know shit u fuckin' don't want me to fly off the handle u ain't got shit ya'll suck more dick than ur moms, u ever wonder why so many people left this site cuz ya'll wack and are fuckin' gay u think ur so much better
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i am much better
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open mic rules: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=141490 leave ya link: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=165166 u have 24 hours to post a link with proper feed back if u dont understand what is a proper feed back click on these links above they should help those who really dont understand and for those who is playin dumb u'r one step to being BANND from open mic... |
no disrespect dawg but you need more practice. im sayin da honest truth and tryin to help u out because niggas tryna hurt ya feelings and shit lol and aint tryna tell you to work on dat shit and keep ya head up. i kno im not da best and shit, i need practice to, so dont thnk im just sayin this shit......................keep ya head up, practice, practice, practice..............
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^^^ thats not a proper feed back plez give more details....
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oh ite lol overall, the verse needed help. in my opinion, you should stretch the lines and make them longer by addin sum multis and shit. also instead of spittin simple shit like: "and end up dead in a trunk" you should add sumptin to spice it up to catch da readers eye and make it a hard ass punchline. just add more multis and the main shit that niggas would want to hear in a battle verse, then itll be alright. go to da tutorial and practice wit shit. keep ya head up..............lol is this good?????
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^^^ PREFECT FAM GOOD LOOKIN OUT.....
and remember what i said about u know what.... just 3 quick ones..... |
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