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*GHOSTE* 01-31-05 04:51 PM

*GHOSTE* vs Viper
 
Battle Rules:

6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 01-31-05 at 05:21 PM

Must drop verse in 15 minutes after check in.

System 01-31-05 04:51 PM

*GHOSTE* has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-31-05 04:51 PM.

System 01-31-05 04:52 PM

Viper has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-31-05 04:52 PM.

*GHOSTE* 01-31-05 05:02 PM

I guess dis dudes rhymes can be considered pretty sick/
cause i was readin his other battle, and i threw up when i read dat shit/
when dis dude wheres his seatbelt, das da only time hes strapped/
and his verse is what my baseball bat said to his face...WACK!!!/
i dont understand how he can claim to be a gangsta/
when its obvious dis cat packs less heat then refrigerators/
wit a name like viper, id expect u to spit venom/
but u aint poisinon me, cause im spillin blood on ya denim/

quick 8 barz...fo a quick battle...holla...


~1~

Viper 01-31-05 05:04 PM

i tripped across your profile and it seems your wacker than expected,
so you think your connected, selling drugs well your geting lyrically infected,
your wrecked kid, your 13 years old you cant even spell a simple word,
now you can write a verse, thats gotta be the gayest thing that ever occured,
i take it you like to scare people theexorcist4747, you'll be familiar with 666,
flip it upside down you got 999 you'll be dialing that number with a head full o bricks,
ill give it four more lines considering i asked for ten seems you cant even read,
you should give up and pleed, this druggy has been taking too much speed,
i posted this verse in 7 minuts or less, i dont need to waste time on a rookie,
it's sad to see this cat come up and get put down to be crumbled like cookies,


i came kinda simple buts thats all i needed,

explanations

*in his profile it says he is a drug dealer so i went off that for a bit
*he is 13 years old
*he spelt ghost wrong
*his aim is theexorcist4747
*666 is the devil
*999 is the emergancy number in the u.k
*

thats about it... lets hope he shows..

hope you like :thumbup:i asked for 10 lines and he did unlimited

POpA KaP 01-31-05 09:29 PM

Voted For: *GHOSTE*

i gotta go wit GHOSTE on dis one...

punches: Ghoste (he used clever metas...and viper's were corny)
metas: Ghoste
flow:ghoste (viper stretched a little wit his multis)
structure: Ghoste
multis: viper (use them more properly tho next time)
wordplay: Ghoste

no hate...i based this vote on pure facts...viper is goin be ill if he can control thos multies...so bof a yall keep workin...

v/ ghoste

.1.

*GHOSTE* 01-31-05 09:35 PM

good lookin out mayne^...uppin..........................

*GHOSTE* 02-01-05 03:54 PM

uppin...uppin...uppin...uppin...uppin...uppin...up pin...uppin...uppin...uppin...uppin...

DQ 02-01-05 04:33 PM

Voted For: Viper

*GHOSTE*

I guess dis dudes rhymes can be considered pretty sick/
cause i was readin his other battle, and i threw up when i read dat shit/
^bit played but still cool opener

when dis dude wheres his seatbelt, das da only time hes strapped/
and his verse is what my baseball bat said to his face...WACK!!!/
^okay okay

i dont understand how he can claim to be a gangsta/
when its obvious dis cat packs less heat then refrigerators/
^rhyming is weak...kinda played...

wit a name like viper, id expect u to spit venom/
but u aint poisinon me, cause im spillin blood on ya denim/
^decent

Overall decent drop but could've used mor creative and bold personals or punches.Vocab was okay,structure nice and you had your flow on lock.But as I said,you had some played stuff in there,try to avoid that...no hate...


Viper

i tripped across your profile and it seems your wacker than expected,
so you think your connected, selling drugs well your geting lyrically infected,
^okay...

your wrecked kid, your 13 years old you cant even spell a simple word,
now you can write a verse, thats gotta be the gayest thing that ever occured,
^hehe,nice

i take it you like to scare people theexorcist4747, you'll be familiar with 666,
flip it upside down you got 999 you'll be dialing that number with a head full o bricks,
^good good

ill give it four more lines considering i asked for ten seems you cant even read,
you should give up and pleed, this druggy has been taking too much speed,
^funny shit...

i posted this verse in 7 minuts or less, i dont need to waste time on a rookie,
it's sad to see this cat come up and get put down to be crumbled like cookies,
^good closer

Like your style,it's like you're telling a story and dissing him but in a laid back kinda way...You had nice personals,tracked him down a little which is good of course.Not too much played lines,kept it all tight.Multis definately upped your flow,vocab and structure are tight to.Solid drop!

*GHOSTE* 02-01-05 04:38 PM

aight...aight...its all good...still uppin........


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