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Parallel vs Personify
Battle Rules:
12-30 Topic: Gods Rival No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting 3 days after check ins... after this no rematches Minimum posts to vote: 600 Check in by: 02-03-05 at 05:50 PM Closed - Expired / old battle win Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Parallel has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-31-05 05:58 PM.
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Personify has ACCEPTED this battle on 01-31-05 05:59 PM.
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No rematched afterword huh? Guess I'll have to merk you now:). Good luck bro.
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..Gods Rival.. I studied his Movements & knew the way he Attacked His styles were Clear, even his defence was in Tact I tried to Stand by, even with god over my Shoulder Fierce powers from the underworld, I lost Composer No matter the struggles, I cant Defend such Offence Always in my head as I sleep, its such an Annoyance It’s Disturbancing when I cant even sit back to Relax Say what you want but I already know all the Facts Every word said, confuses others and Creates Fear Stress flowing threw my brain, there Goes a Tear Standing back all I saw was the odds dropping Fast The odds were back in my favour, so I was to Last Some moments felt like I was about to lose Property Then I remember God was always around to guide Me I almost felt like I miss guided to a further Extension I wasn’t Thinking, finally Realized, wrong Dimension Practice was needed so I could Plain my Preparation It was another mission, needed to win for Elaboration The only thing I could do was, work hard to Achieve It The impossible, to impossible, I just couldn’t Believe It |
God's Rival
One Man's Eye Light casts no shadows upon this world forgotten, I wander around the fields and I climb these mountains. I look over the vegetation which dies at my blink, I bend down for a drink in a pool of acid, makes me rethink. This world is mine and I wouldn't trade it for life or death, If someone wants my world then he will have what is left. God comes upon me saying that this world is no longer mine, He steals my world and I get looked down because I'm not divine? The truth is God's greatest rival, and yet I still am mentioned, My light world now disappears at God gives his intervention. Another One Dies I made this world upon which this man lays his head, I provide him with shelter when he lays down in bed. I've fed and said that I will forever give him aid, He scoffs at me and laughs at the world for him I made. I grow tired of his complaining and decide I want a change, People who will praise me instead of a devil who is deranged. I take back my world so he tries to destroy my art, As he departs he says I have lost this world, but to me its one part. The Truth One man's eye can lead to another human's demise, Because inside life breathes and dies to other's cries. What truly is God's Rival? Is it the devil or something else inside? Fire burns and hingers those that do not receive his grace, Trying to re do those actions but inside this computer there is no backspace. The question remains what rivals god beyong any other motive? What makes people think that when one action is done God will forgive? God's greatest rival lies in the man upon which he made alone, By responding to the fighting he really cast the first stone. Had to type this at school, I really need to stop waiting to the last minute to type my battle verses, oh well. Some metaphors, not a ton. Good luck para. Vote Honest or Not At All :thumbup: Don't Understand? Don't Vote! |
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Voted For: Personify
I THINK PERSONIFY TOOK This one. I think he had a better all around drop, and his verse seemed to all flow together. i was really long, but i was suprised that i didnt drift away. i was really feelin ur verse, and i think u came wit it. u stuck to tha topic well, and urs was more interesting. i was feelin ur whole structure and rhymin also, but u kinda ran outta things to say near tha end, and it seemed like u were repeating some stuff to say...elevate on that... parrell-u had a good drop. i was feelin ur all around verse, but i dont think u came interesting enough for me. to tell u da truth, ur verse was kinda boring to me. and i did understand it..ur verse was short, but u did hit tha topic head on, and worked well with it. altho i think u kinda struggled on it a lil bit. i was feelin ur rhymin, and i think u came wit more creativtie... RTF on battle against cJ...good drops |
Thanks for the vote. Will RTF.
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