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new to the board, feedback appreciated
new to the board, i never really done anything like this before and i'd just like a little feedback. i dont really have a topic to go off on but since this is a battle site i guess i'll just throw out a couple of those types of lines, i guess they are more of hype lines since i'm not battlin no one...
Bars and hooks, my pad's like a Stephen King book Bigger than Suge, w/ literature leaving you shook take a look, money's in my future like Lenny Cooke I got took, 3rd pick, in '86 i'm a rook See what you missing? i'm heartless but my conscience is kickin If you listen then you realize my content is sickening Linguistic precision, on point like laser incisions Only through fission, will you seperate my mic and my visions I can't be touched, fair warning if i ever get rushed i clutch an automatic that i'm likely to bust You must, not oppose if you want me to trust Talk too much and i'll rip your stomach up like a crunch Murder is the case, when i spit a bar in your face I erase foes, and put my men up in there place What i got on my waist, will have u praying like Mase If you're in god's grace, blood wont be the last thing you taste I put time in my rhymes, so when i spit it shines And finds a way to intertwine inside your mind You breathing's a crime, a legitimate fine should be assigned Jay-Z Blueprinted the game, but i made the designs When i'm in the zone, my style can't be cloned And it's written in stone, that i alone, will own raps throne Like Caeser in Rome, you moan, as i pierce to the bone And phone in your murder, verbal death is condoned --- aiight, i dont want to bore you, so i'll stop there, feedbacks appreciated. peace |
this was aight, keep elevatin'... if you had a topic that you rhymed on, you could be nice... you got nice rhymes an flow an all that shit, find a topic... i can't think too good right now, tomorrow i'll leave better feed back...just tryin' to give feed back, cuz no one else does...
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Yo i think this piece was hot right here, keep doin your thing, check some of my shit out....
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I like this dunn, you got some nice vocab
keep elevatin 1 |
thanks to those of you who gave me some feedback, i appreciate it. like i said, i'm new to the whole computer scene, is there anything on the site where like there is already a topic u can rhyme about or anything like that? aiight, thanks, and ninoscar i'll check out your stuff
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you this was tight kid ya just started out? ya can elevate wit some more practice keep it up, don't let these Catz be sleepin' on ya shit. reply to other Catz posts to
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this shit was ill
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again, thanks for the feedback, and yeah i'm new at this, i'll try to post more, i just been working a lot lately.
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you pretty nice if you get on a specific topic than you would rip it.........
if you want to than we can work on a colab ..... thats pretty much how introduced myself to the board, through colabs.. if you want a place to rhyme on specific topics than go to a cypher....... if you go to a crew thread and impress someone enough than maybe theyll pick you up...... gettin in a crew is the best way to break out on dis board in mah opinion....... anywayz jus keep elevatin and hit me up if you down 4 a colab 1 try to give feedback on some of mah shit too |
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