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Hide From Life
Yo life is hard when you all alone jealous of those wit no broken home keep 2 my self n watchin da world go by payin no mind just thinkin thru my eyes Mysteriously lurkin,puttin on a show das deliriously workin insides is hurtin, but da outsides is worse-n- n thru my eyes da world is twirkin people lyin,killin n hurtin still cryin n perpin wonderin why its i dat da devil is flirtin but da blame iz on me i wasnt lookin at da possibilities for me 2 be freed,i stay hidden-and down my abilities but Ju's gonna rise,fuck my demise......my rhymes'll neva die, da tears i'll never cry, my fear ill never hide its clear in my eyes, what i must do to survive come out da dark,drop da mask and let my heart re-vive |
yo come on give me some feed back please....
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yo please yo...dont sleep on it...can i pleaze get some feedback on dis
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YO!!!!! there is 13 people viewin open mics and cant not 1 of yall drop some feedback????c'mon yo...ill return da feedback too shit come one
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yo ill be honest ya need a little more to your piece n the length wise but ill tell ya it was alright...i give ya a 7/10 for your emotion, unique structure, and try to complexity ya vocab...if ya need more feed holla back other wise check out my apocalypse
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I liked it...........I Liked The Structure.........
I Liked The Flow Somewhat......... The Only Thing Is It Could Have Been A Lil Longer...........Otha Than Dat It was Good Keep Doin What U Do And Return Da Fava |
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