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Checkin In My First Battle.....I THINK Im Ready....

right,fuck,my record is fuckin pissin me off,ive had 2 hard battles(well 1,i think i shudve won the last 1 easy),and now i just look wack,shits gonna change...

CHECKIN IN...

and i wanna talk 2ya repitwa,hit me up on AIM...

pz

here it is...

this 'beats fucked',you could call it 'heart disease'/
dishin out tha 'flu',coz tha shit uz 'spittins' 'sleaze'/
u couldnt 'fuck tricks' pullin a 'prank' on 'jackass'/
i dont 'wrestle' kidd but u can still call this a 'backlash'/
you just a newbie 'herb',an tha punches u 'plant' is 'floral'/
u gotta 'bitch attitude',ya only 'angers' 'pre-menstural'/
couldnt put 'shit' 'down' layin a punch on 'mr hanky'/
with heavy 'artillery' ya rookie ass couldnt 'tank' me/
nates ideas of 'ill' like 'catchin shit' from a 'whore'/
started gettin a rep as 'sick',started beggin fo more/
'diggin kittens',this pervs idea of 'gettin pussy'/
tha cost of losins 'risin' so 2u this ones a 'tall' 'fee'/
i 'squash' beef like pests,coz i put ma 'foot down'/
like an unwanted farm pet,ur a 'kat' thats gonna 'drown'/
go originate ya shyt,an try to elevate a 'lil higher'/
get a win soon,ya still be cruisin round a 'lower flyer'/

uppin for originate...

into:

You beatin me "It just won't happen"

You talkin shit over the internet you just a net-nerd...
You beatin me is like Metallica releasin a rap record.....
( it just won't happen )
You beatin me is like a guy in Texas in a house w/ 40 heaters....
You beatin me is like a guy in a wheel chair w/ dirty sneakers....
( it just won't happen )
You beatin me is like the pope revealing a weapon hes carryin...
You beatin me is like Fat Joe becoming a vegetarian....
( It just won't happen )
You beatin is like Jay-Z gettin rid of his Fat lip....
You beatin me is like a Parapeligic doing a back flip......
( it just won't happen )
You beatin me is like trhe amish inventin computers....
You beatin me is like the virgin club becomin child abusers....
( it just wont happen )
You beatin me bitch I doubt it....
You beatin me is like Suge Knight rockin Sean John outfit....
( it just won't happen )
You beatin me is like P~Diddy not makin a remix.....
You beatin is like Nelly speakin perfect English....
( It just wont happen)
Im Nate tha Infamous,
You cant get wit this,
You beatin me is like a nun gettin syphillis.
IT JUST WONT HAPPEN!

You my hoe Im your master nate,
Yo kid you like a 'pro fisherman' the way you 'master bait',/
his shit to ill you cant dance wit this,
you could 'spell your name out' and you still wouldnt be 'fabolous'/
Callin me a newbie but ima about to earn this,
You aint 'neva packed heat' ya like fuckin 'new furnace',
Dont rap about guns ya computer nerd genious,
The only '9 millimeter' you ever seen was your 'penis',
You know my verse you cant get wit it,
Tha only way you makin it to 106 and park is if i gave you my ticket/
You know you cant rhyme wit me,
Come to tha hood and take a 'ride wit me',
you claim you '#1' yu on nelly's nuts so whateva,
Muhfucka look at the verse you in a 'dilemma',


AYO THIS IS MY FIRST BATTLE SO DONT SLEEP!

Ay I meant *this shit to ill not *his

ORIGINATE definately won this one. His punches were direct, plentiful, had a nice flow, and kept it solid the entire time. Good Job Nate. - Elevate! -

erm,pretty blatent crew vote?

Vote=Tricksta

Flow-Tricksta
Punches-Tricksta
Multis/Inners-N/A
Wordplay-Tricksta
Overall-Tricksta

Nate, you're not that bad of a battler, but the weay you set up uour verse is horrible..The iT just wont happen business is horrible, it made tyour verse boring and you cant have that...Tricksta broke out of his forced wordplay a lil and had a few nice lines...Nate...just work on your style and you'll be alright...best of luck...

uppin...

BREAKDOWN
 

TRICKSTA


this 'beats fucked',you could call it 'heart disease'/
dishin out tha 'flu',coz tha shit uz 'spittins' 'sleaze'/

BLAH AT THIS OPENER MAN,NOT FEELING IT,WAS WAY TOO SIMPLE FOR MY LIKEING REWORD IT MIGHT BE EFFECTIVE THOUGH


u couldnt 'fuck tricks' pullin a 'prank' on 'jackass'/
i dont 'wrestle' kidd but u can still call this a 'backlash'/

NOT TOO BAD,NOT TOO HARD EITHER


you just a newbie 'herb',an tha punches u 'plant' is 'floral'/
u gotta 'bitch attitude',ya only 'angers' 'pre-menstural'/

OK

couldnt put 'shit' 'down' layin a punch on 'mr hanky'/
with heavy 'artillery' ya rookie ass couldnt 'tank' me/

BLAH AT THIS,TOO BASIC


nates ideas of 'ill' like 'catchin shit' from a 'whore'/
started gettin a rep as 'sick',started beggin fo more/

NOT HARD MAN,NOTHING DECENT HERE,OK I GUESS


'diggin kittens',this pervs idea of 'gettin pussy'/
tha cost of losins 'risin' so 2u this ones a 'tall' 'fee'/

BLAH


i 'squash' beef like pests,coz i put ma 'foot down'/
like an unwanted farm pet,ur a 'kat' thats gonna 'drown'/

WITH THIS I KNOW WHERE YOUR GOING,BUT NOT TOO HARD THOUGH


go originate ya shyt,an try to elevate a 'lil higher'/
get a win soon,ya still be cruisin round a 'lower flyer'/

BLAH AT THIS ENDING,NOT TOO HARD MAN,NOT MY LIKEING OF AN ENDING BUT YOUR VERSE WAS ALRIGHT NOTHING REALLY ELECTRIFYING


....ORIGINATE....


You talkin shit over the internet you just a net-nerd...
You beatin me is like Metallica releasin a rap record.....

OK OPENER NOTHING REALLY HARD,YOU MIGHT THINKSO,BUT I FEEL TOO BASIC SHIT


You beatin me is like a guy in Texas in a house w/ 40 heaters....
You beatin me is like a guy in a wheel chair w/ dirty sneakers....

OK SHIT

You beatin me is like the pope revealing a weapon hes carryin...
You beatin me is like Fat Joe becoming a vegetarian....

HAHA AT THE SECOND LINE, FIRST LINE DIDNT GO WELL WITH THE SECOND THOUGH BUT COOL


You beatin is like Jay-Z gettin rid of his Fat lip....
You beatin me is like a Parapeligic doing a back flip......

BLAH AT THIS,AWFUL SHIT


You beatin me is like trhe amish inventin computers....
You beatin me is like the virgin club becomin child abusers....

NOT FEELING THIS


You beatin me bitch I doubt it....
You beatin me is like Suge Knight rockin Sean John outfit....

SETUP BLAH,SECOND LINE OK,NOT HARD THOUGH


You beatin me is like P~Diddy not makin a remix.....
You beatin is like Nelly speakin perfect English....

BLAH AT THIS


Im Nate tha Infamous,
You cant get wit this,
You beatin me is like a nun gettin syphillis.

NOT FEELING THIS


You my hoe Im your master nate,
Yo kid you like a 'pro fisherman' the way you 'master bait',/

OK.BUT SETUP WAS WAY TOO MUCH FILLER,NOTHING FITS MAN


his shit to ill you cant dance wit this,
you could 'spell your name out' and you still wouldnt be 'fabolous'/

NOT LIKEING THIS EITHER MAN


Callin me a newbie but ima about to earn this,
You aint 'neva packed heat' ya like fuckin 'new furnace',

TOO BASIC


Dont rap about guns ya computer nerd genious,
The only '9 millimeter' you ever seen was your 'penis',

SORTA FUNNY,NOT TOO HARD THOUGH


You know my verse you cant get wit it,
Tha only way you makin it to 106 and park is if i gave you my ticket/

BLAH AT THIS,NOT FEELING IT


You know you cant rhyme wit me,
Come to tha hood and take a 'ride wit me',

NOT GOOD MAN


you claim you '#1' yu on nelly's nuts so whateva,
Muhfucka look at the verse you in a 'dilemma',

NOT A GOOD ENDING MAN,NEED TO COME HARD HERE,WORK ON YOUR SHIT ALSO


ALRIGHT BOTH VERSES HAD THERE FLAWS,BUT I GOT TRICKSTA TAKING THIS,I FELT CAME WITH A LITTLE MORE PUNCHES THAT HIT HARDER,NOTHING REALLY GOOD,BUT BETTER THAN ORIGINATES,TRICKSTA WORK ON YOUR OPENINGS AND ENDINGS,SETUP A LITTLE BETTER,AND END WITH BETTER PUNCHES,ORIGINATE YOU NEED TO WORK ON YOUR SETUPS,YOU HAVE TOO MUCH FILLER IN YOUR VERSE,PUNCHES NEED TO BE MORE ORIGINAL AND HARDER,YOUR ENDING NEEDS SOME WORK ALSO


VOTE TRICKSTA

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