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lil jj_1 02-05-05 10:20 AM

Im Bac Bitch
 
ey yo im bac i juss had ta change screen names cause it wouldnt let me log in on my otha one.......but hurr it go


man u so old livin at home wit ya mom,but yet u ask her to buy u a out fit/
not no more lil man cause u look in da chamber where da bullet aint out yet/
but then i squeeze,and i pull da trigga(bang)u no da chamber releases/
now i left and i aint thurr no more,but yet u no da police is/
and they try to get me but u no im to fast for all of they asses/
so catch dis,but u caint cause rite now im on a miracle axis/
but if they do catch me its my trial,and i got a right to a jury/
but if somebody gon run they mouth then i guess imma fight in a hurry/
so for da first stay put,and stay outta da process/
cause i dont care wat da d-a say immma hit u regardless/
so juss stay out ,juss stay out of da business/
if not ill leave give u heat for a gift and belittle ya christmas/
leave a shell behind so i'll be da one dat u would remember/
through da years like january,and then back to december/
cause wat u dont no,u do no but then u juss dont no it/
till i come round u no u got but u juss dont show it/
and then u put it off like it neva existed/
now u in jail,because u resisted/

STL BABY...DAS HOW WE DO...LOL....YEA

lil jj_1 02-05-05 04:41 PM

ey yall sleepin on dis shit come on yall let me get some feedback

Kyleon 02-05-05 04:48 PM

i didnt like ya structure...flow was good though with wordplay in good use here..nice piece...some lines ya used were wack but most was dope fam...good job

overall:7.5/10

return da favor on my open mic..link in sig

lil jj_1 02-06-05 03:06 PM

ey yo thanx for da feed....imma look forward to sum of yo shit imma see wat u got...i holla


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