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Anxiety vs. ~Babylon~
Check in's due before Thursday 11:59 PM Eastern Time Zone Verses Due Before Sunday 11:59 PM Eastern Time Zone Line Limit: 20-50 Lines Max First to 3 votes win 3-0 = KO Voting Ends Wendesday, Feb. 16 at 11 PM Eastern Time Zone You must vote in 2 other battles or you will not continue on into the next round. Topic: Inbetween the Lines |
Aight, check... Good luck babylon.
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CHECKaslovacia.....................g'luck too
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"In between the lines" we look inside, for the evil, crooks that hide read inbetween lines, place the book to eyes suspicious sences, between, malicsous sentences the wonder, its rigerous and I begin repenting this hateful thinking, discreat, but tasteful venting I'm faithful that if I'm hasetful I can face the resending hidden codes, in places only, were condisending is known repetative examples, messages are sending in clones these thoughts digested, but I'm caught in these messes but whats the message, that I pause when I'm restless thinking to thought, as, reading to understand seeing the upper hand, stutteres but loved the plan theres something I cant see, somethin that doesnt appear something that wasnt there, thats now somethin dear attention to detail, spirit wishes to mention I'm frail its a detention of hell, crazy, like a mission to jail missin the exposer, still wishin to see closer things hidden in the statement, the front is a poser but I pause to think, that hells claws, are jinxed I know there not tired, the devil never reaches the brink so what on the paper, slices my soul, spiritual razor letter from my mothers death bed, a myrical caper this silent shreaking, feals like violent thinking reading between the lines, of my mothers speaking |
Gimme like 5 minutes.
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Every part of me... Guts, stress, fear... Put down on paper, blood, sweat, tears... Torn apart... I'm gettin hounded again... Wont give up, just jot it down wit a pen... It's just how i get by, how I'm expressin my life... It helps to cut back, on this depression and strife... It's my motivation, to make these songs... Makes me a better person, and makes me strong... Get to know me better, its a way of finding me... Every part of me, its basically my diary... The only time that i can really express... How i feel, and people, will still be impressed... A line in my rap, is like a minute of my life... A punch in my battles, is like the blade of my knife... A story in an open mic, is something i went through... And most my topical battles, are something i did too... So when you read my shit, you can sense the heart in me... How i live my life, because i express every part of me... And when i mix it up, it's just me re-defined... When it comes to rap, i put myself inbetween the lines... |
coo...............lets get some votes...................
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Vote: anxiety
Babylon - dope drop,I feel maybe a lil 2 much higher vocab at places, structure was cool, stort was original good work, topic coverage was not in my opinion that well done...you tied it all together here and their with lines explaining how it related but i dunno..dope drop on the reals tho..no h8 - 8.5/10 Anxiety- Im liking the Rakim approach to this topic....matter of fact ima put that rakim quote in ma sig...1sec//// yo dope approach to topic, coverage oof topic on poin all the way through...you came from an angle which was easy to relate and identify to and you had some dope metaphors up in htere,,,dope man -9/10 |
~Babylon~: first thing anyone notices about your piece, is the impressive high vocabulary which isn't always a strong aspect but in this case, I felt it was suitable.Your drop had a sort of mysterious vibe over it,confusion and complexness and such (all the things I think about when I hear the topic "in between lines").Structure was good, flow was okay and overall solid drop!
theres something I cant see, somethin that doesnt appear something that wasnt there, thats now somethin dear ^favo lines anxiety: everyone knows your writing style by now and I love it. You use basic vocab but still manage to express such deep things and raw emotion. This makes it very easy to read and you have written another strong piece most people on here can relate to.Structure was good and had your flow on lock,piece has an emotional yet powerful sense to it. A line in my rap, is like a minute of my life... A punch in my battles, is like the blade of my knife... ^tight lines and your ending was also pure dopeness Vote goes to anxiety, ~Babylon~ also had a dope piece but was feeling anxiety's just a lil more...Nice battle! DQ |
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Anxiety wins to due 2-0 KO.
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