my dad - moment of death ..real story
 

this woz a spit again from last year.....wen i wen jus started mc'in......is dedicated to ma dad..........an da moment wen he woz about to die...,im not showin off anythin, jus thort i'd share dis wid ya
(real story)
... iz a mini rap













I seen all the pain since i was four
When my father was rushed into the hospital door
One more hour to live and fight death
While my father was out of brethe
All the stress caused his nerve to explode
Like a revolver gun after you reload
All his life flashed before his eyes
While hearin the sound of our pleadin cry
Still compeatin for the chance to live
What more could he do, What more could he give
Workin 17 hours a week, 365 a year
To support us, like each strand of hair
The docter sayin everythinz ok
All ya need is some medicine today
But now look !, it turned out like this
Father die'in while wer all cryin
But one question saved his whole life
How woz i gunna support ma kids an ma wife?
He woke up really quik, death woz passin- tik tik
He cryed were is my wife? were is ma kids?
While we wiped the tears from our eye lids
Ran as fast as we cud jus to reach the room
Nuffin but a bed, Freezin cold like a tomb
"Let me leave with ma kids an ma wife"
After surviving, woz disabled for life

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man i liekd this i was really feeling this

very good job keep elavating 9.5/10

this was coo i didnt really catch the rhyme but the emotion was there and i kno that sometimes its hard to catch a flow or a rhyme when you reading something. I wish it woulda been a lil longer

tnx , no sweat...........tnxx

by da way wus coo?

yeah i am feeling that...srry about your pops girl...you showed good emotion...the rhyme scheme was off but it all went together well...you should make it longer and add a chorous and record that shit ma...holla back...1

sfe, nah is ok...........shit happens