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Critic 02-10-05 07:58 AM

Rendezvous
 
Rendezvous

..…Lost in my tears,. fear getting near
….Sounds in the distance vibrates ear
.…Remain despair,. need to disappear
..No longer can bear this chilling affair
Airs dense, exhale with misted breath
I love you, but our last kiss was death

Final encounter

We must stop meeting, love depleting
.My telephone number needs deleting
.…I’m married yet we keep prolonging
……Regardless of our love’s Belonging


It’s over sorry!

Critic 02-10-05 08:00 AM

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=176412

Sorry bit short but shits a bit fuck round about now quick key word..

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Hammer 02-10-05 11:24 AM

was cool man.

bit short but to the point. Nice lyrical skills with the vocab.

wouldnt get that into an audio i dont think but was emotional

Ma$fit 02-10-05 12:14 PM

it is pretty shot cuz...but u can say it was good...nothin too special here...6/10...keep doin ya thang

return tha fava...links in da sig

Critic 02-11-05 07:13 AM

Thanks for the feed on this but it was only meant to be a short drop didn't
want to carry it on until it got boring...

SUPERVILLAIN 02-23-05 11:37 AM

your drop was short and sweet, but to the point. i wish you would of drawn it out a bit more for effectiveness.......but it still works for me. nice shit homie. im sorry that i didnt get to this open mic piece earlier......but i never saw it up. next time.......drop a link in the crew forum (...in the crhyme sinter thread...) with the work you really want the team to peep and we'll try to get to it and respond quicker fam, word. keep up the good work my crhymie.

p.s.- i wont say nothin' to your wifey......lol. one.


s.v.

Critic 02-24-05 07:52 AM

Lol ^ thanks for bumping SV lol thank god I don't have internet at home
shit...

Yeah this was just a quick key I'm still rusty but no longer got writers block..
I have had it most of 2005 lol..

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Dirty Nigga 02-24-05 08:42 AM

Nice shit, saolid vocab, flowed real well, short an straight too the point, nobody likes ta read a 50 line open mic, you should get mad feed on this becasuse everybody will actually read it being so short n all, ya feel? dope peice, 7.5/10


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