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Will We Ever Decide?
Wrote When Thinking Of You Not seeing you is sad and I am blinded by my tears “I love you” is all I want to whisper in your ears If fighting for you is needed, room will be made Need wisdom, I call upon the only one I praise Jesus, to make my love happen, help is what I need I don’t want to breathe when you aren’t near me my heart bleeds I’m stripped of my pride wishing I had died, god be my guide Getting you is my only thought, push all else aside I’m hurting inside, Katrina will we ever decide? I was writing this when we were first starting off. |
this poem is great, good flow and vocab, it expresses alot about what your going thru, keep it up man....pc
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weerd... Uppyn this.
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This was beautiful, you managed to capture a lot of raw emotion into this small poem...Found good balance in your vocab and expressed what you were feeling very well. Wish I had someone writing this for me...*sigh*...Keep on dropping stuff like this man! Good going...
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this is dope, Good clear emotion in it, good drop.
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uppyn thys.........
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Uppyn this........
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To me this poem sends some importance to people that might need alittle leading in a spiritual fate on this board,because some of us forget so many things that helped us all through.
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weerd now uppyn thys shyt.
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Decent Piece, You Had Alot Of Emotion Up In Here I Was Digging That, Your Structure Was Good, Good Use In Vocabulary Basically The Main Part Was The Emotion And Descriptions, I Was Feeling This Piece Man Good Job...9/10 Keep Em' Coming Man |
Weerd keep the helpful feed coming people.
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yea man i gotta give you your props on it keep it up man its deep
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